Question

I need some advice, please. :)

Answer 1

Give me a second while I write out my situation. (^~^)

Answer 2

Okay, so for my creative writing class, I have to write a creative non-fiction story. My story's topic is "the time I got banned from eating peppermints."

Basically, this is a true story that happened to me in second grade and basically what happened is that there was a birthday party. For some reason we had one of the big cakes that you had to cut slices for instead of the cupcakes. There were peppermints around it, so we could get peppermints too. There were green and red peppermints and I decided to eat the red peppermint first, leaving the best for last. I had the peppermint in my mouth, and I was also drinking a caprisun. My friend said a joke and I totally choked on the juice - NOT THE PEPPERMINT. But the peppermint flew out of my mouth and I was, like, choking. My teacher was panicking and I was kind of laying my seat. The teacher was telling me to say something, anything. I just said hello and everyone laughed. I was kind of cnfused because what else would I say? Anyways, the teacher thought that I choked on my peppermint even thought I tried to explain to her that I choked on my juice, not the peppermint. Because of that, I wasn't able to eat any more peppermints. But I really wanted to eat the green one! It was my favorite and I couldn't have it. It sucked. And basically that's my story.

Anyways I wanted advice from other writers to see how I could write this story well. I have my first draft due Sunday night, and I'll probably let you guys read my draft on Saturday before I send it. But anyways, I just wanted some advice and helpful tips from you guys like maybe what I can do to make it sound like the mind of a second grader and what I can so to avoid having the mentality of an older person and make it actually be like a second grader is thinking this. Maybe some things that I can see to have good pacing I guess. Thanks!

Answer 3

I loved this story and I'm looking forward to seeing the draft!

Okay, I'm no writer but I have one idea (totally opposed to what you were thinking because I couldn't think of any advice, hope that's okay). Instead of writing it as through the eyes of a second-grader, use over-the-top vocabulary and exaggerate. Like instead of "There were green and red peppermints," something like "Beside the cake, lied an assortment of red and green peppermints. I gazed at the candies as if they were rubies and emeralds. I grabbed a red candy as well as my favorite, green." Something like that. Is it tacky? Absolutely. But it's sure to get a laugh. I don't know though, I'm not much of a writer myself but just a thought.

Answer 4

@Cecil_the_Weasel ,

Thank you so much for your feedback! I actually love your suggestion. It's pretty smart to exaggerate like that, especially since when one is younger, they sometimes think that everything seems bigger. I like your idea. Thank you. :)

Answer 5

Kill the teacher and steal the peppermints.

Answer 6

@Conqueror , I thought about it, but I have to write Creative NON-fiction. *ugh emoji* Thank you though! :D

Answer 7

~ FIRST draft coming tonight. I got a bit busy and couldn't post it yesterday.

Answer 8

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