Question

can someone please help me edit my essay please

Answer 1

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Answer 2

i just want anyone to read it and edit it for me

Answer 3

Could you maybe copy and paste the text here so that I can read what you have so far?

Answer 4

@sanra123

Answer 5

i need help writing a conclusion

Answer 6

I can help you with that, but perhaps we should go through what you already have and fix some of the grammatical issues, if that would be okay with you.

Answer 7

okay i would appreciate that

Answer 8

Alright, starting from your first sentence...
Perhaps you may want to reword that a bit. You use the word 'achievements' and then go on to write "that I have done". It's a bit unnecessary to state this, as the word achievement means something that you have accomplished.

Answer 9

what can i change it to?

Answer 10

There are many alternatives; one of which could be: "One of my most important achievements in life was going from middle school to high school."
-Also note that I used 'was' rather than 'is', as the achievement occurred in the past, meaning surrounding words would also be in the past tense.

Answer 11

ohh okay i understand thanks for the notice

Answer 12

"I believe that students first think that high school is going to be the toughest 4 years of their life. Full of stress and workloads that cannot be handled."

Here, these two sentences should be combined into one, as the second line you have written here is dependent (or relies on more information in order to make sense).

Answer 13

oh so is that good.
I believe that students first think that high school is going to be the toughest 4 years of their life. Full of stress and workloads that cannot be handled.

Answer 14

Not quite...
You would have to replace the period with a comma in order to combine the two thoughts.

Answer 15

believe that students first think that high school is going to be the toughest 4 years of their life,full of stress and workloads that cannot be handled.

Answer 16

That's better, but don't forget to add a space after the comma.

Answer 17

Oh okay

Answer 18

For the sentence right after that, just add a comma after "Truthfully", as a short pause is required.

Answer 19

okay

Answer 20

"If you start out fooling around in your first year of High School, it might turn into a bad habit for the years to come."

-"High School" does not require capitalization, as it is not being used in a title (proper noun such as in 'Redwood High School').

Answer 21

so its high school

Answer 22

Yes, that's correct.

Answer 23

okay

Answer 24

"Start planning from now on. Choose more than 2 colleges and start looking at the requirements and start working on them before it becomes too late."

-'and' becomes repetitive here

Perhaps you could think of a way to word these without using 'and' as much?

Answer 25

Start planning from now on. Choose more than 2 colleges by looking at the requirements and start working on them before it becomes too late."

Answer 26

Good.

"As for me, Layal, I waited to think about college and finally during my senior year, which drowned me in stress, I went to ask for help about colleges and meet with a counselor who told me that I have to get my stuff together before things get too late."

Perhaps you could reword this section. One suggestion as a start would be to add a period after 'college'.

Answer 27

As for me, Layal, I waited to think about college and finally during my senior year, which drowned me in stress, I went to ask for help about colleges and meet with a counselor who told me that I have to get my stuff together before things get too late.

Answer 28

Perhaps try breaking it into a few sentences rather than just the one, as this would be a run-on sentence.

Answer 29

idk how

Answer 30

"I waited to think about college until I finally decided to ask for help from a counselor during my senior year."

Answer 31

okay

Answer 32

@sandra123 if you are finished, please close the question.