Question

so i'm writing this story for my creative writing class and i need advise/ feedback on how to make it better.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1NR-jVmUZJn6CcQ8p3a4eoNnnsckJD5UhYbSqq1vIItA/edit?usp=sharing

Answer 1

The link isn't working.. actually I don't even think it's a link..

Answer 2

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1NR-jVmUZJn6CcQ8p3a4eoNnnsckJD5UhYbSqq1vIItA/edit

Answer 3

try not to make it all dialouge. Add details of where they are. like what does the house look like? What time of day is it? Where do they live? add lots of details and it will make it have a better flow to it

example.
I woke up one morning to hear the TV in the living room. "Kayla must be up" I thought. I got out of bed and walked downstairs to see i had been correct.

add what they are doing and where they are.

Hope that helps

Answer 4

thanks @colleenoliver19