Question

Help with my short story? :)

Answer 1

Nick, Sione, and I were in the 2nd half of a basketball game. As Nick was dribbling the ball, he accidentally twisted his ankle. He had to sit out for a bit while Sione and I were still playing. The other team was beating us by 5 points! Sione and I were playing but still, we couldn’t do it without Nick. Nick was like the backbone of us 3. Together, we were like the Three Musketeers. Minute by minute they were still beating us. Then by 10 points! Sione and I were getting our heads back in the game and we were slowly catching up. I kept making three’s and Sione kept making his lay-ups. Then when Sione attempted one of his lay-ups, he accidentally counter stepped and miscalculated, and just slightly sprained his ankle. Then it was up to me and my other mates to finish the game. There were 3 minutes left and the score 35 - 39. Then as my team and I caught up, I n shot the last shot and it went around the rim and everyone’s jaw dropped as it spun around the rim and finally went in! We had done it! We won the game against the Panthers! We got the trophy then celebrated with the team! Nick even jumped off with his hurting leg. When we came home, we had a nice barbecue and then we knew it was well deserved. The End.

Answer 2

That is that.
Now let me get the feedback.

Answer 3

1.13 Graded Assignment: Write a Short Story
74 / 108

Individual Feedback:
Good job. Your narrative arc was very clear in this story. However, you did not meet the length requirement. In order to add some depth to the story, you could work on character development and add vivid details to make the story come alive to your reader. See rubric for more details.



Character Development: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZQTQSbjecLg

Short story writing: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=s1qItKJ8RiQ


Organization & Purpose: Good job. You need to work a little on your use of transitions and creating a proper flow in your paper.

Development & Elaboration: Please work on your use of dialogue within a short story.

Answer 4

As expected :<
I was counting the words and yes, it was too short indeed

Wait lemme get something up for ya and we can work it out somehow there

Answer 5

Oh yeah, quick question...
Is there a way we can get this done in like the 30 mins or so? Or 25 or 35? Because I still have a lot of stuff to do before 11:59 PM PST :p In order to get a good Report card...

Answer 6

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ZWmnPInYajXqJ7mm9IBDpeENpVcKSHSZlvesSMvOkUk/edit?usp=sharing

Answer 7

Should I sign in?

Answer 8

Uhh...given that you have only 240 words, no....

Answer 9

Nah, no need

Answer 10

Seriously??? :o
Ugh haha okay
Let me email my teacher real quick to ask her if she can extend it for one day...

Answer 11

Ya, you're not even halfway done for the bare requirement of 500 words, so I would suggest so... xD

Answer 12

Anyhoot, just add to what we discussed earlier and you're good to go :)

Answer 13

Thanks!! :)