Question

Finishing a UNSOLVED STORY- DUE TODAY HELP ME PLEASE

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1m0uObGrVhupFpVuodlO1qXVDiOurrtP55rqydxWXRUM/edit

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@saldis

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u cant open it unless it on my google doc hun

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...oh whats your email?

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i cant open it

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ok ill just make it an attachment...

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thats isnt google docs

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idk it wont open

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@saldis

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Ok so what do u want me to do :)

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the ending i want is Patrick wife cheating on him with the surgeon at her hospital ...nd doing angels of mercy which are people killing sick people to end their pain and "save them" Patrick is a cop so his wife basically frames him for killing the patients

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....and im stuck...

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im in the middle

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dang do you want to just submit my whole book lol

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what u mean

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I mean its hard for the a writer to just jump in the middle of a story and finish it. I am a full time writer.

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@Hayhayz

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i did the background...DDD: he is mentally ...u know...unstable because of this mothers death i need to do like 8 more chapters

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Uh oh... I struggle at writing... Dan come help @518nad

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lol oki

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@518nad

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yeah saldis actually is probably better at writing than me

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-.=...oh my freaking gooodnesss

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Dan what do you mean!!! You are a good writer -.-

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@jabez177

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@jabez177

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the ending i want is Patrick wife cheating on him with the surgeon at her hospital ...nd doing angels of mercy which are people killing sick people to end their pain and "save them" Patrick is a cop so his wife basically frames him for killing the patients

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because of their disagreements and she doesn't have the killing connection/desire with him

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i have writers block? idk how to like...go on

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like the middle Patrick is suppose to arrest a criminal that kills low income people in the beginning then as the story goes on patients in the hospital die and he gets framed and arrested for his wives crime and her partner (surgeon) (female)

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so you need help going on ok i can help you with that

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idk how cops act DDD: and like how aggressive it is for them to actually take a criminal in custody ....aand ike im trying to copy James Patterson way of writing

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oki...

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Thanks babe! I got it from here <3

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Ok so first i have a few edits. So when you are writing a story you need to spell out 1st and 2nd and 3rd

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my teacher said don't do that....she wants it to be a descriptive mystery with tension

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like i have to change time using reflections or 25 years later

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in the beginning its a dream and he is woken by his close friend Gregory

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Ok so could i like make a new beginning. Your teacher? Really just like 1st looks bad in a story. Because u can still be descriptive words like first or first and foremost ect. ya know.

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thats for explanatory responses she told me

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ok its fine. I just got taught a different way :)

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i cant i turned in the beginning already and she said keep going...:/

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oh its ok!

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ok im gonna help you know where u are stuck

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why cant it be a happy story

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so like you know them christmas movies...where like the guardian angel gives the "stooge" a bad memory of their past ...that's basically the beginning

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Dan shut up and chill no one asked for ur opinion <3 xD

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um...because its a unsolved...crime..theme story

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so some1 has to ...die...or like get convicted

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i say someone dies

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aand its hospital patients...:DDD

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ok yea :) xD

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your story has to be edited a bit. Some sentences are missing commas or have unexpected starts. theres a few run on sentences and stuff

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Dan stop typing we dont care

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yea....i need help with that dann..:/

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can i add u in the doc?

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The ideas are there, they are clearly conveyed, i like the husband and wife interaction

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some of the description early on doesnt flow

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Yeah add me when is this due?

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tmm...=.-

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once im unstuck i believe ill just flow with it and finish...but my teacher is asking for toooooo much

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like she wants pictures...DDD:

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ok what are u guys ....email...

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Ok mine is sheilaaldis@gmail.com

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ok i added u...

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dan i forgot yours sooo...yea

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are u good now?

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i need dan to correct these grammatical errors....:/

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and like how would i go into detail of him restraining the murderer?

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ok

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i think captain Jhonson should just text him the address of where the criminal is inhibited and patrick should arrive....faking questions

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read him is miranda rights

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then the criminal will try to fight him off

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but Patrick takes his frustration that he had last night with his wife out on the murderer

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thats good?

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yes it is :)

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y u leftttt

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Nooo gmail kicked me out!!! I wouldnt leave u! I love writing!
How is it coming so far?

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im stuck

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Ok on what part hun like try doing a plot twist

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no the capturing the criminal

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can u come back...DDD:

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oh ok then

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1m0uObGrVhupFpVuodlO1qXVDiOurrtP55rqydxWXRUM/edit

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...

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it says i have to pay

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@bonnieisflash1.0

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this is long

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...yea ill just give you the summary

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okay

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omg os just restarted

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ok Patrick mother disappears when he is eight leaving him to mrs. smith and after the death of mrs. smith he is orphanaged .... he gets adopted during highschool by his close friend Gregory parents

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Leading his to graduate highschool at 16 because they were very strict ... he goes to barry university with gregory gets a masters in police administation and so on