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....this isnt a question

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@harman.singh

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I think you should research on how to write persuasive essays. In specific, the structure to follow. Usually, its> Intro, 3 body paras and conclusion. Have a look at sample essays online and they will give an idea for what to write in each paragraph.

Also, you have said "based of the teacher on how comfortable she is". In persuasive essays, you need to stick to your own argument and write about what YOU think of the issue, not the teacher.

Think of this as arguing with your friends. If they say cats are better than dogs, how would you reply to them being a dog lover. Remember, you can't say I like both. Must choose one

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Hello ^~^

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@harman.singh

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Can you re-post the link of the assignment please?

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https://lti.flvsgl.com/content/9ugns1f7qp9f5v925ifgqhqi90/educator_geometry_v15_gs/module01/01_07a_01.htm

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Okay so what are your three main reasons to why you should be allowed to use technology in class?

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well because

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- We need them for social media
- For calculators etc.
- Texting your mom etc. to pick you up.

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If those are your reasons, this is what your body paragraphs should contain(approximately).

1) We need them for social media. Why do you need them and how are they useful? Give evidence
2) For calculators. Why are they sometimes better than using normal calculators? Give evidence again
3) Texting your mom etc. Why is that important? Evidence.

Looking at your work, I would still suggest going through sample persuasive essays online. It will help you get the assignment done much faster and will help you write a better essay.

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i did look at examples...

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If you have, you should analyze those essays and try to follow the same structure in your one. The reader should be able to clearly see the arguments you are referring to. Have a look at these ones as example. You will see how the arguments are clearly laid out in different paragraphs and provide relevant evidence to support their contention.

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you realize this is my intro

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not my whole essay right

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Oh was it? It thought it was part of the body paragraphs because you were giving examples in them. Generally, you shouldn't include any example/evidence in the intro. They should come in your body paragraphs later on

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LOL

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wait im changing it anyways lol

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this time its awesome i feel it, im using sophisticated words, complete formal sentences !

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Your intro doesn't need to be that long as well. Its generally 3-4 sentences,stating your contention and a little bit about the arguments.

Again, I would recommend reading the essays in the attachment. See how they have written their introductions and use the same structure as theirs

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Is English your first language?

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second @Vuriffy

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Okay i finished the intro is absolutely fabulous

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sorry wrong one

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I made a minor change!

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- We need them for social media - For calculators etc. - Texting your mom etc. to pick you up.


REMEMBER YOUR TOPIC IS TECHNOLOGY IN MATH CLASS, not just in class. Your reasoning must correlate with math related topics.

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This is a specific question, not broad toward technology in class. You must come up with two new ideas for your body paragraphs to help construct a essay that actually answers the question.
Calculator was quite okay.

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@harman.singh what do you think?

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Good effort. Improvement from the previous one :)

To make it better, you shouldn't give any examples in your intro as I said earlier. Based on what you wrote, I rearranged it a little to show you what your intro should look like. Have a read

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gotcha!

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Also refer to what @Vuriffy said earlier. He made some great points that will help you write a better essay

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im trying to think of some arguments but im so lost

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@harman.singh

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Umm..you need to talk a little bit about your arguments in your intro as I said earlier. You didn't mention them.

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like what?

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@Vuriffy

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Vuriffy is my intro good

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@harman.singh

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brb

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There are a variety of technological devices available that we can use for communication and to help us solve problems during class for example our phones calculators, and tablets. I strongly believe that students should be allowed to use technology on tests, during class, and on campus. Use of technology would enable the students to...*can you try to finish this sentence for me?

Also, your start to the fist body paragraph looks pretty good. I like how you have used the words "The first reason" which make it clear for the reader to identify your arguments.

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Use of technology would enable the students to focus much more clear than if not having the privilege to use technology

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Awesome. That's your intro done :)

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YAY you're online

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@harman.singh

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thats new and improved

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Intro looks good to me :)

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no i have some paragraphs in there 2 paragraphs

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I had a look and seems like you can improve on them. Have a look at the example essays and try to compare them with yours

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@harman.singh

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i didnt change up the 1st paragraph because I dont know how to improve it

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thats the full essay

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Very short.