Question

this is a short sample of my writing and sorry if it makes you sad or angry of how deep it is...

as i sit in the floor, looking at the art i just created and destroyed. anger sadness anxiety fills my heart. bitterness overcomes my sprit. as i cry silently isolating my in the darkness of this world. i get up trying to shine the light but it it just goes out. as i try so hard to light it again i relise its broken.broken like my heart broken like this world broken like that marrige your family had. as i relize there isnt always a happy ending to every story

Answer 1

<3

Answer 2

i dint read it but i rate it an 11/10

Answer 3

it needs work.

Answer 4

I love it! You've done a great job!

Answer 5

There are a few grammar issues, but other than that. I could deeply relate to this and I loved it. To make grammar free, it would be like this:

As I sit on the floor, looking at the art I just created and destroyed. Anger sadness anxiety fills my heart. bitterness overcomes my spirit. As I cry silently isolating myself in the darkness of this world. I get up trying to shine the light but it just goes out. As I try so hard to light it again I realize it's broken. Broken like my heart broken as this world is broken like that marriage your family had. As I realize there isn't always a happy ending to every story.

(I do love it and I hope you keep writing.)

Answer 6

i like your poem @11123