Question

I've added to these verses so lemme know what you think

I don't want to go outside
In the fear of someone asking how I am today
Talking bout the weather
How the flowers are nice, we both know they wither
Human interaction is wearing
On me but my family always told me to be caring
But if they ask me what's up, I can't be sharing
That information cause it'll pry out
From the back of my mind
Everything happening, yea Its all too loud
Maybe I'll remember to say nothing much just to be kind
Just focus on my music even though I hate how it sound
The attention just makes me want to hide
On my sleeve, losing pride
Losing your game, can’t see me cry
We don’t need to talk, you know I never lied
That’s never been true and I think you know exactly why
In order to save me, I have to leave you behind

Answer 1

Sounds great!

Answer 2

omgggg thats is soooooooo goood! i loveee ittttt!!!!!!!!!!!

Answer 3

OMG I LOVE IT!!! MEOW ITS AWSOME

Answer 4

thanks! i've been working on some other songs so i might consider posting later..

Answer 5

oooooo

Answer 6

oh yqyyyyyy!!

Answer 7

level 7!

Answer 8

i look forward to seeing your other songs!

Answer 9

Oooh, nice! I'm looking forward to seeing it, This is great!

Answer 10

:)

Answer 11

Nice job bro

Answer 12

everyone is just saying "nice" "cool" stuff like that but i think this really speaks to me its very touchy and would be something cool to get published

Answer 13

i like it

Answer 14

thank you.

Answer 15

check out my poem "MY GIRL"

Answer 16

i did already but please dont self promo on my verses

Answer 17

hmm, I would like to hear it with a melody yk? Typically in songs its more of a repetitive melodic type of style. I think to get the best reviews you should probably come up with a sound and record it lol. GL and looking forward to hearing the results :)

Answer 18

no self promotion is adding the poem on here, not telling people about it, that is two totally different things

Answer 19

that phrase is self promo a reference would be like "it reminds me of.." or "feels similar to..."

Answer 20

anyway lets not argue about this just please dont do that

Answer 21

it kinda gives rod wave vibes a lil bit but more like a normal sad song

Answer 22

just stop dude. leave your stuff on your posts and i'll leave mine on mine

Answer 23

its not a rhetorical question

Answer 24

i do check out your poems so please refrain from asking me to look at them on my own post

Answer 25

yes! that's exactly what self promotion is! do that in chat not on my questions please

Answer 26

@cyber

Answer 27

This is reallyyyyyyyyy gooddddd great workkk!!

Answer 28

i give it a 2/10

Answer 29

Hey
How's your life?
Yeah, mine's alright
Oh, I'm doing fine
(It's just life, honey)
Well, hey
I'm having a bad day
So tell me it's okay
Sometimes it's just that way

Answer 30

My mama said, The grass is always greener where you water it
Go and fill your diet up with greens, and reds, and oranges
Coffee goes cold, so you better drink all of it
Go and live your life, cause you know you were born for it

Answer 31

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Answer 32

LOVE ITT!!!!

Answer 33

@eeliak

Answer 34

meow

Answer 35

@bemis

Answer 36

what

Answer 37

read the top thing

Answer 38

mkay

Answer 39

im lazy to read

Answer 40

but nice thing ting

Answer 41

thing thing *

Answer 42

keep it up BESTIEEEEEEEEEE

Answer 43

UwU

Answer 44

OMG YESSS GOOD JOB!!!!

Answer 45

*good job*

Answer 46

Dk if I already replied and too lazy to check but-

I ❤️ it (:

Answer 47

It's seems good. I like how you phased it. Keep up the great work. I'm sure if you keep practicing you'll become famous or something.!

Answer 48

AMAZING I LOVE IT!!!!!