Question

Thoughts?
will post down below

Answer 1

The lost and forgotten Ghost

Once upon a time, there was a child who loved to do many things like drawing, writing, but the thing he loved most of all was exploring the woods behind his home but one day his exploring would lead to a quite literally deadly discovery. On that fateful day, the child was wandering through the woods and stumbled upon a clearing that he knew was not there before he noticed that in the middle of the clearing stood a small house the perfect size for a child like him, as he approached the house an extremely tall man exited the house it was impossible for him to have been inhabiting the house. The child noticed that the tall man was wearing an extremely tall top hat with a red ribbon tied around it and a black silky suit that had a long tailcoat and a blood red tie tucked into his suit. The tall man looked down at the child with a hint of curiosity and said, “What are you doing in these parts kid? It's not safe for you here.” The tall mas voice was deep the kind of deep that sent a cold shiver down your spine. "I-I was exploring the woods behind my house.” the child stuttered as he pointed in the direction of his house. “What are you doing here? I've never seen this clearing before and I explore these woods a lot.” The child said looking curiously up at the tall man. “I don’t normally live in this clearing but I was needed and so I am here. What’s your name kid?” The tall man said. “My name is pumpkin! What’s yours?” The tall man smiled and said “I have been called many things by many people. My name is Charos but you can call me whatever you wish” “Ok! I think I will just call you moss because moss is cool and so are you!” The tall man chuckled and said “you should come inside it’s getting rather chilly outside.” as soon as moss said that pumpkin realized just how cold he was and hesitantly entered the. Pumpkin saw that the house was as tiny as the outside portrayed it to be with a small kitchen and a large fire surrounded by a few chairs and a couch when pumpkin turned around, he saw that moss’s height had changed moss was still wearing the same outfit but had become smaller. Moss was still extremely tall but was a normal tall like his dad. “how’d you do that?” Asked pumpkin “The shrinking? It is just a little trick I learned a while ago. Here sit down at the table.” pumpkin walked over to the small table and sat down. Moss asked, “would you like some tea?” “Sure, I would love some tea if it’s not too much of a bother.” pumpkin said as he watched moss put an iron tea kettle on the fire. “What kind of tea would you like?” Moss asked. “Well, I really like mint tea but whatever you have is fine!” Moss started to looking through the cabinets and after a moment said “you are in luck I have one more mint tea bag left!” After a few minutes, the tea kettle began to whistle and moss walked over and pulled it off the fire walking over to the table and poured the hot water into two cups sitting on the table pumpkin picked his up and took a big sip of his tea and screamed “HOT TEA HOT TEA!! “Tall man started laughing and said, “I have a gift for you pumpkin.” moss handed pumpkin a tiny frog that was missing an eye. “I love him!!” pumpkin squealed. “His name is Fred he will be you spirit guide for the afterlife.” Moss said. ““SPIRIT GUIDE?!? AFTER LIFE?!?! What are you talking about!?!?” pumpkin screamed rushing up from the table knocking everything off the table in the process. Moss sighed and mumbled “this always happens every time” as he picked everything up off the floor.

Answer 2

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Answer 3

this is not the full story i am writing more

Answer 4

WHa- wha?

Answer 5

i need someone to proof read my story

Answer 6

and give me their opinion

Answer 7

Ight then.

Answer 8

You made that?

Answer 9

way more

Answer 10

this story was inspired by a drawing of a ghost i draw alot.

Answer 11

damn bel rung

Answer 12

Weeeeeeeell for starters you do have to make paragraph

Answer 13

*s*

Answer 14

Wow. That is amazing. You could improve some on the grammar but I like the storyline. Try reading over this again and fix some grammar mistakes such as name capitalization and whatnot, but this is very good and I can't wait to see more.

Answer 15

And you might have to use paragraphs on the side, considering it's better that way. Easier for proofreading.

Answer 16

WOW i love this i cant wait to read more :D

Answer 17

thats a really amazing poem keep up the good work:>

Answer 18

that peom reminds me of a campfire story and its really good

Answer 19

I will post the rest of it in a different question in a lil bit