Peoples, I'm writing the beginning of a song. Can y'all tell me what you think?
I tried for you
And lied for you
I cried for you
But boy I aint got nothin in return
You left me in the dirt
And now you gotta learn
What consequence you earned
Cuz boy I aint got nothin in return
Woke up Sunday mornin
With a text on my phone
“Hey yo baby how you doin?
Are you alone?”

Question

ILOVESPAGHETTI · Answer

That's really good, you should continue writing

MusicGeek · Answer

@ilovespaghetti wrote:

That's really good, you should continue writing

Thanks. And I'm stuck on what to write now.

sxdsouls · Answer

it's nice, i'd like you to finish it, ask for ideas perhaps

Jaynater · Answer

Keep on keepin' on and get it done my dude. Hope it goes well.

ILOVESPAGHETTI · Answer

@musicgeek wrote:

@ilovespaghetti wrote:

That's really good, you should continue writing

Thanks. And I'm stuck on what to write now.

Is this based off personal experience, perhaps you could get it done that way?

MusicGeek · Answer

@ilovespaghetti wrote:

@musicgeek wrote:

@ilovespaghetti wrote:

That's really good, you should continue writing

Thanks. And I'm stuck on what to write now.

Is this based off personal experience, perhaps you could get it done that way?

Yeah. it's based off a personal experience.

foxy44 · Answer

THAT IS AMAZING!!!!

MusicGeek · Answer

@foxy44 wrote:

THAT IS AMAZING!!!!

Thanks

ILOVESPAGHETTI · Answer

@musicgeek wrote:

@ilovespaghetti wrote:

@musicgeek wrote:

@ilovespaghetti wrote:

That's really good, you should continue writing

Thanks. And I'm stuck on what to write now.

Is this based off personal experience, perhaps you could get it done that way?

Yeah. it's based off a personal experience.

I think you should write it like a poem, and continue on like a story. It might sound a little weird but I think you can come up with something

MusicGeek · Answer

@ilovespaghetti wrote:

@musicgeek wrote:

@ilovespaghetti wrote:

@musicgeek wrote:

@ilovespaghetti wrote:

That's really good, you should continue writing

Thanks. And I'm stuck on what to write now.

Is this based off personal experience, perhaps you could get it done that way?

Yeah. it's based off a personal experience.

I think you should write it like a poem, and continue on like a story. It might sound a little weird but I think you can come up with something

Okay

Jaynater · Answer

Ye, just done ask me for advice or else I'm gonna wind up telling you the next line should be:

You blocked me like a traffic cone

xD

MusicGeek · Answer

@jaynater wrote:

Ye, just done ask me for advice or else I'm gonna wind up telling you the next line should be: You blocked me like a traffic cone xD

xD

Sock · Answer

I think its good so far ;o

dylanjustchillin · Answer

writing is good but its all bout that delivery

MusicGeek · Answer

@dylanjustchillin wrote:

writing is good but its all bout that delivery

Ok

MusicGeek · Answer

@sock wrote:

I think its good so far ;o

thx

Jaynater · Answer

@dylanjustchillin wrote:

writing is good but its all bout that delivery

^