Question

What can i add to this introduction?

Answer 1

@axie help?

Answer 2

im thinking XD

Answer 3

i think you misspelled ¨hind¨ im not sure if its supposed to be hide or not, but i like the intro so far. i would add some more details, like why are they hiding? just to give the readers more information. this is just my opinion.

Answer 4

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Answer 5

ok so lets get started
1. needs more detail, this sentence reminds me of a brick wall
2. Hide
3. repetitive word, replace with some thing like "as kate looks behind her, she spots footprints in the snow, prints that are not her doing, and wonders if she is alone in the woods"
4. suspect

Answer 6

well, first.. we have to analyze the enviornment, they go from a crowded city to the woods, why would their be snow?

Answer 7

overall I think it was good and in the sentence they suspence someone is following them should be suspect

Answer 8

that is true. replace snow with mud. it talks about mud in the sentence.

Answer 9

Narnia type stuff

Answer 10

so really just fix the few spelling mistakes, add more details, and your good, i do like it so far.

Answer 11

try replacing that with ¨the reached the forest¨ or ¨they reached the woods¨ it doesn't sounds that good when you use ¨some¨ in that sentence.

Answer 12

what should i say?

Answer 13

do you think i have done all these?

Answer 14

Thank you for your help