Question

Help on a hook for an essay, please.

Answer 1

Essay Topic; Do violent video games make people more likely to be violent in real life?

Answer 2

Try to start with a fact

Answer 3

so one hook type i always use is facts and statistics

Answer 4

so its like this for example. There are 1,203 athletes at Ohio state university. 629 are male and 574 are female. $109,382,222 are put into athletic funds. If you paid all of them, how much money would the college have left for things they need? Paying college athletes seems like a good idea, but it has some downfalls to it.

Answer 5

That's math.

Answer 6

🤦🏻‍♂️ Guys, a hook is like a topic sentence. Something to draw the readers in, like following:

"Video games: Harmless fun or virtual killer training?"

Answer 7

Oh, okay.

Answer 8

It's a topic sentence cretin. Even Rylee88 confirmed it. Hit the road.

Answer 9

Well, that's a title but the question I was agreeing to.

Answer 10

LMAO i thought so

Answer 11

It was an example. One of numerous potential ones.

Answer 12

Again, you thought of nothing. You gave him statistics. Completely different and irrelevant.

Answer 13

A hook has to GRAB the attention of the reader. You don't do that by starting off with statistics. Heck, most people would stop reading by the end of the first sentence if you went that route. You save the statistics of later, when the reader is actually invested.

Answer 14

Try explaining what your essay is about and then give your theme with a little evidence.

Answer 15

Of course, you know nothing, which is why I usually don't help people like you with questions. Ignorant and think you know everything. But by all means, give all your years of sagely counsel. I'm sure you'll do great!

Answer 16

zaddy

Answer 17

Okay, good heavens man. I went with the one that was more effective to grab the reader's attention. Look at how long your example was compared to mine. I went straight to the point, obtained the reader's attention, and then that would allow them to read on because they are interested.

Answer 18

But ultimately, this boils down to what @Rylee88 thinks is better suited. We can let him decide.

Answer 19

It was a topic sentence. Shouting in all caps like a child won't help you.

Answer 20

Agreed.

Answer 21

Well then, that explains everything. Have a good day.

Answer 22

Well, what I am looking for is someone to help me write a hook for my essay. I was going to do something like "Do you play video games? Do you get raged when something you don't like happens?" But I didn't know if it was good or not. All I really need is someone to help improve my hook.

Answer 23

Then mine did exactly that. You're welcome ;)

Answer 24

I see both of your P.O.V's but I already KNOW what a hook is. I just need someone to help IMPROVE it.

Answer 25

Is there any way you could help me improve it?

Answer 26

so it should be like, " have you ever watched a show about ninjas or superheros? have you ever tried to do their stunts?

Answer 27

this is the exact same thing that happens to kids that play violent video games"

Answer 28

do you understand what im trying to say?

Answer 29

Sorry, I had to get lunch lol.

Answer 30

Yes, I understand.

Answer 31

ok hoped i help

Answer 32

So is this good? "Have you ever played a video game? Have you ever raged at the fact you lost? Does it change your behavior?"

Answer 33

Yes thats better good job

Answer 34

Okay good, do you think you can help me change the first question? Because each question is for each paragraph.

Answer 35

So each of those questions is the topic for each paragraph.

Answer 36

Thats good but you are not really supposed to question. Your supposed to get the reader hooked on and wanting to read it and for me that is not the best hook.

I would say something like- If you are playing a video game would make you violent or you would stay the same. Then say a few other things to add on to that.

A hook that has a sentence with evry question is not always the best, because it makes me think is the author asking me if I think this or does He/she not know?

Do you understand what I am trying to say?

Answer 37

Oh, yes I do thank you!

Answer 38

So how's this? "If you play video games and you lost, does that make or rage or change your behavior."

Answer 39

yes i was kind confused a bit
i thot it was supposed to be hook and then your questions

Answer 40

or reasons

Answer 41

like for this

Answer 42

There are 1,203 athletes at Ohio state university. 629 are male and 574 are female. $109,382,222 are put into athletic funds. If you paid all of them, how much money would the college have left for things they need? Paying college athletes seems like a good idea, but it has some downfalls to it. College athletes should not be paid to play because the school needs the funds for class supplies and clubs, the athletes are training to become a pro, and if all the athletes become paid then they would not have enough funds for other sports and clubs so things would have to be cut.

THIS IS MY ARGUMENTATIVE ESSAY

Answer 43

Mine is argumentative as well.

Answer 44

I don't get statistics, do you think you could explain lol?

Answer 45

Also another thing you dont want to start off with a question to start every body paragraph because what it would make me thing is is this a Q and A or a essay. I would state your question like Do you get violent when you play too much then say you would or would not by having a study's show... then put the quot from the article then keep on going with your essay.

Then when you are done with the paragraph dont forget to check it over with a peer and use the website called grammerly to also help check your work.

(Dont forget to source it so you to plagiarize)

Answer 46

Oh okay.

Answer 47

One second.

Answer 48

imma give an example from your topic the numbers are made up ok?

Answer 49

There are 2 millon people in the world that plays fortnite. out of those 2 million 100k ppl became school shooters and blamed it on the violent game.

you kinda have to do some research to find things out

Answer 50

Also @yrj8498 this- College athletes should not be paid to play because the school needs the funds for class supplies and clubs, the athletes are training to become a pro, and if all the athletes become paid then they would not have enough funds for other sports and clubs so things would have to be cut.

That is very run on so is there any way you could break it up or make it shorter?

Answer 51

I have to go but Thanks! I'll check back later.

Answer 52

I was just letting you know. Also @rylee88 when you have a body can you post it here or share the link so I may help you out by giving you fixes or grammar help.

Answer 53

yes i can tell you are very good in the writing subject

Answer 54

Ya I skipped two grades of English when I was in high school because of how good I am in English.