Question

I'm writing a short story and need to know if i need to make improvements so far!

Answer 1

A day in the life of Walter the Water Monitor
I woke up in my spot under the mangrove tree. My family --- two daughters, one son, and a wife--- were still asleep. I stood up and went to look for food. I ended up finding some frogs to eat. When I got back to the mangrove tree my family was awake. My youngest daughter came running for hugs. My son stayed behind. So did my eldest daughter. My wife --- Teresa --- came up to me and kissed me on the cheek. “ I see you found food?”
“Yeah, but I only found frogs.”

Answer 2

It's not done

Answer 3

You need a title, a date, a name, and The company, topic, or who your writing to

Answer 4

the title is "A day in the life of walter the water monitor"

Answer 5

thank you maxton

Answer 6

you also my friend need to stop using so many periods and commas, also make sure nothing a run on sentence

Answer 7

i use too many commas, i can take some out, alr!

Answer 8

Good job, yes with the editing and adjustments it will be perfect. Thank you for sharing c:

Answer 9

Interesting

Answer 10

than you Alexis!

Answer 11

thank*

Answer 12

i made the adjustments

Answer 13

A day in the life of Walter the Water Monitor
I woke up in my spot under the mangrove tree. My family --- two daughters, one son, and a wife--- were still asleep. I stood up and went to look for food but all I ended up finding were some frogs to eat. When I got back to the mangrove tree my family was awake. My youngest daughter came running for hugs and My son stayed behind and so did my eldest daughter. My wife --- Teresa --- came up to me and kissed me on the cheek. “ I see you found food?”
“Yeah, but I only found frogs.”

Answer 14

thxx

Answer 15

This is very interesting... I can’t wait to see it when it’s fully finished. It sounds great so far (:

Answer 16

I would love to read more

Answer 17

Definitely want to read more, no need for improvements!