My book so far
One day two people went into hiding because they were not normal. They were test people for scientists. The test was to mix human DNA with wolves DNA to create superhumans for war but something went wrong. After the scientists noticed it wouldn’t work they tried with new subjects and killed the old ones but that was before they escaped.

February 18 2052, Lead Scientist Entry
Today the other scientists are saying that they think the test subjects are planning something but I think they are wrong. But there has been a lot of activity in the tanks. I think the new subject is up. Write later.
Last entry.
One day one of them went out to get food. They had to wear hoods and baggy pants when out because people wanted to kill them. The one that went out to get food was the girl.She came across a person who was homeless and she thought he was a little bit weird so she walks up to him and askes “were you used for a test” he said “yes but something went wrong” and he pull his hat off to reveal a pair of wolf ears.She pulled her hood down to show him her ears and then told him to follow her for a place to stay instead of in the streets so he followed her to the cave where they lived and he asked” how long have you guy been living here?”. She looks at Zero(The other wolf human) and then looks back and says “honestly we don’t really know how long we have been here” then he asks” Could I look around?". “Sure” she said” But please don’t eat the little food we got” He said “I can get some food some people gave me money to be nice to me” She said” oh thank you that would help but also I never got your name” “Jack” jack says “nice to meet you Jack I am Lily and this is Zero” “Zero?”ask Jack “ Yeah his name is Zero” Lily says “oh cool” says Jack.

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My book so far
One day two people went into hiding because they were not normal. They were test people for scientists. The test was to mix human DNA with wolves DNA to create superhumans for war but something went wrong. After the scientists noticed it wouldn’t work they tried with new subjects and killed the old ones but that was before they escaped.

February 18 2052,                    Lead Scientist Entry
Today the other scientists are saying that they think the test subjects are planning something but I think they are wrong. But there has been a lot of activity in the tanks. I think the new subject is up. Write later.
Last entry.
One day one of them went out to get food. They had to wear hoods and baggy pants when out because people wanted to kill them. The one that went out to get food was the girl.She came across a person who was homeless and she thought he was a little bit weird so she walks up to him and askes “were you used for a test” he said “yes but something went wrong” and he pull his hat off to reveal a pair of wolf ears.She pulled her hood down to show him her ears and then told him to follow her for a place to stay instead of in the streets so he followed her to the cave where they lived and he asked” how long have you guy been living here?”. She looks at Zero(The other wolf human) and then looks back and says “honestly we don’t really know how long we have been here” then he asks” Could I look around?". “Sure” she said” But please don’t eat the little food we got” He said “I can get some food some people gave me money to be nice to me” She said” oh thank you that would help but also I never got your name” “Jack” jack says “nice to meet you Jack I am Lily and this is Zero” “Zero?”ask Jack “ Yeah his name is Zero” Lily says “oh cool” says Jack.

Williammcgeorge · Answer

there is going to be more after the last entry but i got to work on it

second · Answer

ok

maths89898 · Answer

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Kuronathedemon · Answer

Amazing

OLIVER69 · Answer

I love it, it's really good. < 3 Keep up the good work and I can't wait to read more. 🧡

Alexis1415 · Answer

I really do enjoy it, may I suggest changing the wording for "test people for scientists" you don't have to I'm just suggesting for it to maybe be scientists test subjects, just a suggestion to like improve the vocabulary on that one part. I do see that in the next paragraph you do use test subjects. As a whole I love it, would love to see the final when it's all put together. 🥰

run · Answer

I think this is really good, I just think that maybe you could change the intro from "one day" to something more unique. also maybe change the "test people for scientists" part. I really love this and hope to see where it ends up going.

Lemondragon555 · Answer

Good

KyledaGreat · Answer

It seems like an interesting premise with a lot of potential for conflict and tension between the test subjects and the scientists who created them.

The use of diary entries and dialogue helps to create a sense of intimacy and immediacy with the characters, and the descriptions of the wolf-human hybrids add an element of intrigue and mystery to the story.

One suggestion for improvement would be to provide more detail and description about the world in which the story takes place. For example, what is the setting like? What are the societal norms and expectations for "normal" humans and hybrids? Adding more context and world-building details can help to create a more immersive and engaging reading experience.

Overall, I think your story has a lot of potential and I look forward to reading more as it develops.