Question

How can I improve this poem I wrote? Also help me come up with a title!

I hate how your so far
And I don’t know a thing
If you’d leave a scar
Or be the one to cling

Are you still the person that I met
Or are you on a different path
Are you already set
Or are you standing on a lath

All of this self doubt
Something I can’t get over
Do I stay on the same route
Or do I get a closure

Answer 1

"I hate how you're so far"

your -> you're

And I don’t know a thing

don't -> wouldn't

If you’d leave a scar

leave->left
Can also do:
you'd -> you
depending how you want it to sound

Answer 2

I had to look up 'lath' to know what it means. Poem work best when they are easy to identify with and understand. I would recommend a different word (possibly using a thesaurus).

Answer 3

Or do I get a closure
-I'd recommend removing 'a' to quickly sink into 'closure'

Answer 4

Some are these are partially grammar but most I think just might sound better.

Answer 5

Magic

Answer 6

Nice poem

Answer 7

It is a really good poem but shadow already answered it