I made this story 1/3/23 tell me if yall like it?
I’m Mr.Prosser this is my story. I can't believe my story.First I saw a kid named John trying to bulldoze his house and asked the kid what he was doing.He was angry that something happened to his job Mr.Posser had got his house cleared out the way.John tried to lie in front of Mr.Posser but he caught him in the lie.I looked like the angry bird when I find out that the house was getting bulldoze.Secondly I rushed out the front door like furious animal grab the material out of John hands before he could break the house.John went to apologize because he realized that we need the roads for faster routes,.Also, to bring the finance into the community.John also realized that road be use for safer routes for school buses.

I’m so happy that John realized that the community needed new roads to get to places Instead of using longer routes in the community.The faster routes helped me from not spending too much money on gas.John and I were happy to help the community from taking longer routes.

I do know that it's going to help bring more money into the community.John says that the more money within saving gas.Another reason its benefit the community because they can go to more business.

John said that taking the school buses on the road for safer routes.
The fire department uses the roads for helping the community with emergencies quicker.I also agreed that the office can use the roads for keeping the community safe.

I was glad that John went to apologize because he felt bad that he is a nice man to the community that everyone loves. Me and John are sorry. I will never do that again i was just trying help you Mr.Prosser.John mom Carls made a punishment for him for now on “you don't mess with everyone else property”.”John says get out my way your house is getting bulldozer”.Mr Prosser out the way really fast like cheetah was chasing him “what are you doing at my house”? John says I'm breaking your house down and making a new store for all the people in the community to shop at.
We needed to cut more trees to build roads.To bring more stores in the community.Help the people get around more for the community.

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I made this story 1/3/23 tell me if yall like it?
I’m Mr.Prosser  this is my story. I can't believe my story.First I saw a kid named John trying to bulldoze his house and asked the kid what he was doing.He was angry that something happened to his job Mr.Posser had got his house cleared out the way.John tried to lie in front of Mr.Posser but he caught him in the lie.I looked like the angry bird when I find out that the house was getting bulldoze.Secondly I rushed out the front door like furious animal grab the material out of John hands before he could break the house.John went to apologize because he realized that we need the roads for faster routes,.Also, to bring the finance into the community.John also realized that road be use for safer routes for school buses.

I’m so happy that John realized that the community needed new roads to get to places Instead of using longer routes in the community.The faster routes helped me from not spending too much money on gas.John and I were happy to help the community from taking longer routes.

I do know that it's going to help bring more money into the community.John says that the more money within saving gas.Another reason its benefit the community because they can go to more business.

John said that taking the school buses on the road for safer routes.
The fire department uses the roads for helping the community with emergencies quicker.I also agreed that the office can use the roads for keeping the community safe.

I was glad that John went to apologize because he felt bad that he is a nice man to the community that everyone loves. Me and John are sorry. I will never do that again i was just trying help you Mr.Prosser.John mom Carls made a punishment for him for now on “you don't mess with everyone else property”.”John  says get out my way your house is getting bulldozer”.Mr Prosser out the way really fast like cheetah was chasing him “what are you doing at my house”? John says I'm breaking your house down and making a new store for  all the people in the community to shop at.
We needed to cut more trees to build roads.To bring more stores in the community.Help the people get around more for the community.

Treeko · Answer

If im being honest it needs a little touch up. It sounds a bit robotic. But other than that good job!

luhivqqcherry · Answer

amazing story so far, but there are some things in your story that need fixing, after you finish a sentence make sure to put a space, and you should fix some wording that could make your story better, and the story kinda seems like a 3rd grader wrote it ( I'm not trying to be harsh on you ), other than the 1-2 things I listed this story is great !!! .