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LaPrincessaHermosa:

Y´all i wrote a story, What y´all think?

LaPrincessaHermosa:

Once upon a time, in a small town nestled deep in the woods, there were three brave girls named Sarah, Emily, and Jenna. These girls were known in their town for being adventurous and always seeking out thrills. One fateful night, the girls decided to explore an abandoned house on the outskirts of town that was rumored to be haunted. As they approached the house, a chill ran down their spines. The old, decrepit building loomed ominously in the moonlight, its windows boarded up and its paint peeling. Despite their initial trepidation, the girls laughed and joked as they entered the house, eager to explore its secrets. As they ventured through the dark corridors, the girls began to feel a sense of unease. The air grew colder, and strange whispers seemed to echo through the empty halls. Sarah brushed off her friends' fears, insisting that there was nothing to be afraid of. But as they turned a corner, they were met with a horrifying sight. A figure stood before them, its eyes hollow and its skin pale as death. The girls froze in fear as the ghostly apparition reached out towards them, its movements slow and deliberate. With a scream, Sarah turned to run, but the ghostly figure blocked their path. Emily and Jenna huddled together, their hearts pounding in terror as the ghostly figure drew closer. It spoke in a chilling voice, telling them of the tragedy that had befallen the house many years ago. The girls listened in horror as the ghost recounted the tale of a family who had once lived in the house. They had been driven mad by the spirits that haunted the building, and had met a grisly end at the hands of their own father. As the ghost finished its tale, the girls felt a cold grip on their hearts. They knew that they were in grave danger, and that they may never leave the haunted house alive. With a final, desperate cry, they turned and ran, their footsteps echoing through the empty halls as they tried to escape the ghostly figure that pursued them. But as they neared the exit, the girls stumbled and fell, their hearts pounding in terror as the ghostly figure loomed over them. With a final, chilling laugh, the ghost enveloped them in darkness, and the girls were never seen again.

DeadlyDiablo:

This is rlly good, Keep up the amazing job.

Lustforlana:

I really like this! I really liked the way you described everything in detail you did a really good job! Keep it up!!

Alanaaaaaaa:

Wow. Just wow, I'd say just horror story but it's better than great. More like perfect but there's another word for perfect so I'm not sure. I think you should continue to wrote more on this story. The more you write the more people are going to want to keep reading. I know I liked it and I would love if you added onto it and tagged me in it.

LaPrincessaHermosa:

@deadlydiablo wrote:
This is rlly good, Keep up the amazing job.
thx

LaPrincessaHermosa:

@lustforlana wrote:
I really like this! I really liked the way you described everything in detail you did a really good job! Keep it up!!
Thank you sm

LaPrincessaHermosa:

@alanaaaaaaa wrote:
Wow. Just wow, I'd say just horror story but it's better than great. More like perfect but there's another word for perfect so I'm not sure. I think you should continue to wrote more on this story. The more you write the more people are going to want to keep reading. I know I liked it and I would love if you added onto it and tagged me in it.
Idk I am thinking of writing more to it but I usually js write short stories cuz if I keep writing it longer I get bored n I run our of ideas, Iĺl see if I add more 2 it, if I do Iĺl deffo tag u in it, and THANK YOU SO MUCH rlly means alot

Alanaaaaaaa:

@laprincessahermosa wrote:
@alanaaaaaaa wrote:
Wow. Just wow, I'd say just horror story but it's better than great. More like perfect but there's another word for perfect so I'm not sure. I think you should continue to wrote more on this story. The more you write the more people are going to want to keep reading. I know I liked it and I would love if you added onto it and tagged me in it.
Idk I am thinking of writing more to it but I usually js write short stories cuz if I keep writing it longer I get bored n I run our of ideas, Iĺl see if I add more 2 it, if I do Iĺl deffo tag u in it, and THANK YOU SO MUCH rlly means alot
I love writing and the main think I love about it is how it helps me with my anxiety. Reading other people's work inspires me to keep writing

LaPrincessaHermosa:

@alanaaaaaaa wrote:
@laprincessahermosa wrote:
Keep on writing, I bet ur amazing at writing as well
@alanaaaaaaa wrote:
Wow. Just wow, I'd say just horror story but it's better than great. More like perfect but there's another word for perfect so I'm not sure. I think you should continue to wrote more on this story. The more you write the more people are going to want to keep reading. I know I liked it and I would love if you added onto it and tagged me in it.
Idk I am thinking of writing more to it but I usually js write short stories cuz if I keep writing it longer I get bored n I run our of ideas, Iĺl see if I add more 2 it, if I do Iĺl deffo tag u in it, and THANK YOU SO MUCH rlly means alot
I love writing and the main think I love about it is how it helps me with my anxiety. Reading other people's work inspires me to keep writing

hellokitty265:

id read it if it were a book even though i hate reading but this is good

SnowyBreaks:

If this was a real book I'd be a fan of it. Im a really big fan of horror. I honestly made horror stories of my own. Keep u this good work. maybe one day you'll become an book author. So damn good. :D

persephone:

Really good story, I'd set the story like...15 years ago, that should be your prologue and then start writing out chapters you know? But make the chapters 15 years after the disappearance.

LaPrincessaHermosa:

Oml thank y'all so much y'all r 2 kind

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