here's my poem for the night, that I actually wrote this time lmao

Im drowning in depression
My heart has gone into recession
They say things change
But nothing fees different
They always stay the same
Always surrounded by lames
They turned my failure into a game
I just can’t live with this pain
I wanna go far away
To a place where i can stay
And feel happy inside
But in my heart love confine’s
I lay here in this coffin
I think about her often
Why’d she leave
Why’d she go
To that question, ill never know
My end is near
Its coming soon
Late at nights
As im staring at the moon

Question

here's my poem for the night, that I actually wrote this time lmao

Im drowning in depression 
My heart has gone into recession 
They say things change
But nothing fees different
They always stay the same
Always surrounded by lames
They turned my failure into a game
I just can’t live with this pain 
I wanna go far away
To a place where i can stay
And feel happy inside 
But in my heart love confine’s 
I lay here in this coffin
I think about her often
Why’d she leave 
Why’d she go
To that question, ill never know
My end is near
Its coming soon
Late at nights
As im staring at the moon

korbie · Answer

@noodlesandriceyt try this one on for size

korbie · Answer

ignore my spelling errors

GoatyGoat · Answer

its okay you'll learn to spell one day

theydontknowally · Answer

awww korkor its felttt, :( I really hope one day you do get better and know that there are better ppl out there for you. she sucks for leaving you. but I promise its gonna get better.

korbie · Answer

@goatygoat wrote:

its okay you'll learn to spell one day

smh ily goat lmao

korbie · Answer

@theydontknowally wrote:

awww korkor its felttt, :( I really hope one day you do get better and know that there are better ppl out there for you. she sucks for leaving you. but I promise its gonna get better.

ty ally ily <3

GoatyGoat · Answer

@korbie wrote:

@goatygoat wrote:

its okay you'll learn to spell one day

smh ily goat lmao

ilyt bbg

theydontknowally · Answer

@korbie wrote:

@theydontknowally wrote:

awww korkor its felttt, :( I really hope one day you do get better and know that there are better ppl out there for you. she sucks for leaving you. but I promise its gonna get better.

ty ally ily <3

ofcc lytt

2hrs · Answer

very cool

korbie · Answer

@2hrs wrote:

very cool

blud did not read it lmao

GoatyGoat · Answer

@korbie wrote:

@2hrs wrote:

very cool

blud did not read it lmao

lolll

2hrs · Answer

@korbie wrote:

@2hrs wrote:

very cool

blud did not read it lmao

shhh i gave medal ONLY ONE WHO DID! like shsush take what i give ugly yellow

korbie · Answer

@2hrs wrote:

@korbie wrote:

@2hrs wrote:

very cool

blud did not read it lmao

shhh i gave medal ONLY ONE WHO DID! like shsush take what i give ugly yellow

I don't put them out there for the medals, I'm hoping to help people feel better about themselfs

korbie · Answer

noodles Ian gon lie u take forever to type

GoatyGoat · Answer

@korbie wrote:

noodles Ian gon lie u take forever to type

he writing u a essay be respectful

korbie · Answer

@goatygoat wrote:

@korbie wrote:

noodles Ian gon lie u take forever to type

he writing u a essay be respectful

imma cry if I have to read a whole essay on my own post bru

NoodlesAndRiceYT · Answer

This poem looks good to me

I don't know if you meant to but "fees" in the 4th line or if you meant "feels" but i believe both of them could work.

My only critique would be to make sure you check your grammar. Make sure things like "ill" in line 17 get their proper spelling, such as the correct spelling in grammar wise for my example would be "I'll". Other than that, looks good to me.

korbie · Answer

@noodlesandriceyt wrote:

This poem looks good to me I don't know if you meant to but "fees" in the 4th line or if you meant "feels" but i believe both of them could work. My only critique would be to make sure you check your grammar. Make sure things like "ill" in line 17 get their proper spelling, such as the correct spelling in grammar wise for my example would be "I'll". Other than that, looks good to me.

I LEGIT SAId IGNORING MY SPELLING, UR NOT MY ENGLISH TEACHER

korbie · Answer

@korbie wrote:

@noodlesandriceyt wrote:

This poem looks good to me I don't know if you meant to but "fees" in the 4th line or if you meant "feels" but i believe both of them could work. My only critique would be to make sure you check your grammar. Make sure things like "ill" in line 17 get their proper spelling, such as the correct spelling in grammar wise for my example would be "I'll". Other than that, looks good to me.

I LEGIT SAId IGNORING MY SPELLING, UR NOT MY ENGLISH TEACHER

and it was feels not fees, like I said I can't spell

NoodlesAndRiceYT · Answer

Remember, posting poems or other writings on here means you are open to positive commentary and criticism. If that's not what you want from you posting your poems, then they shouldn't be posted.

korbie · Answer

@noodlesandriceyt wrote:

Remember, posting poems or other writings on here means you are open to positive commentary and criticism. If that's not what you want from you posting your poems, then they shouldn't be posted.

su. quit riding lil bro

Strawberriesrgud7 · Answer

Definitely felt. This is good.

2hrs · Answer

@korbie wrote:

@2hrs wrote:

@korbie wrote:

@2hrs wrote:

very cool

blud did not read it lmao

shhh i gave medal ONLY ONE WHO DID! like shsush take what i give ugly yellow

I don't put them out there for the medals, I'm hoping to help people feel better about themselfs

oh? now thts odd

korbie · Answer

@strawberriesrgud7 wrote:

Definitely felt. This is good.

ty ty

korbie · Answer

@2hrs wrote:

@korbie wrote:

@2hrs wrote:

@korbie wrote:

@2hrs wrote:

very cool

blud did not read it lmao

shhh i gave medal ONLY ONE WHO DID! like shsush take what i give ugly yellow

I don't put them out there for the medals, I'm hoping to help people feel better about themselfs

oh? now thts odd

whys that?

fwval · Answer

w

NaiNoah · Answer

eh its alr

korbie · Answer

@fwval wrote:

w

ty ty

korbie · Answer

@nainoah wrote:

eh its alr

k thanks

kristen000021 · Answer

Very good Scooby. I actually took 2 minutes to read this cuz ahem im slow. ANYWAYS this is good. depression isnt a good thing to feel.  But you just gotta like forget those things and find new people or things that make you happy. Keep up the good writing

korbie · Answer

@kristen000021 wrote:

Very good Scooby. I actually took 2 minutes to read this cuz ahem im slow. ANYWAYS this is good. depression isnt a good thing to feel. But you just gotta like forget those things and find new people or things that make you happy. Keep up the good writing

smh you ARE slow fr, but ty

kristen000021 · Answer

@korbie wrote:

@kristen000021 wrote:

Very good Scooby. I actually took 2 minutes to read this cuz ahem im slow. ANYWAYS this is good. depression isnt a good thing to feel. But you just gotta like forget those things and find new people or things that make you happy. Keep up the good writing

smh you ARE slow fr, but ty

after that comment i change my perspective. DO BETTER

korbie · Answer

@kristen000021 wrote:

@korbie wrote:

@kristen000021 wrote:

Very good Scooby. I actually took 2 minutes to read this cuz ahem im slow. ANYWAYS this is good. depression isnt a good thing to feel. But you just gotta like forget those things and find new people or things that make you happy. Keep up the good writing

smh you ARE slow fr, but ty

after that comment i change my perspective. DO BETTER

teehee

BlkOps77 · Answer

ts ts

cvrterrr · Answer

juice wrld is really getting to u...

addyslovesjesus · Answer

this is rlly good

korbie · Answer

@addyslovesjesus wrote:

this is rlly good

thank you

korbie · Answer

@cvrterrr wrote:

juice wrld is really getting to u...

this isn't even related to juice buh ok

randogirl123 · Answer

ooooooo i really like it, it shows deep emotion in a person 1000000000/10 :3 meoww

korbie · Answer

@randogirl123 wrote:

ooooooo i really like it, it shows deep emotion in a person 1000000000/10 :3 meoww

can u not, meow, on my post please

randogirl123 · Answer

@korbie wrote:

@randogirl123 wrote:

ooooooo i really like it, it shows deep emotion in a person 1000000000/10 :3 meoww

can u not, meow, on my post please

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