yo chat i'm writing another song I need some feedback on the lyrics.

Drifting feeling the remedy
can't see into the infinity
we are fighting,a war that can't be won
can't you see that there's more
all this time I knew we we were meant to be
don't you want to stay her with me

Question

yo chat i'm writing another song I need some feedback on the lyrics.

Drifting feeling the remedy
can't see into the infinity
we are fighting,a war that can't be won
can't you see that there's more
all this time   I knew we we were meant to be 
don't you want to stay her with me

Cloud4444 · Answer

< 3

SnowyBreaks · Answer

I would add a few more lines to it, and give it a bit more context. but overall,  very nice

xXAikoXx · Answer

I think you should make this the chorus of your song

xXAikoXx · Answer

Lyrics are good btw

xXAikoXx · Answer

But, you should revise the spelling, grammar, and punctuation

ihy · Answer

Good Job

jamesruth · Answer

I like it, but I agree with making more context, and it would definitely be a great chorus.

scarlxrd0412 · Answer

well I'm thankful fr input

scarlxrd0412 · Answer

this was just a,snippet of my song I haven't fully finished it

l33 · Answer

its looks good so far. keep it up

scarlxrd0412 · Answer

i will thx