Question

chat I'm writing a song and I need opinions on the
lyrics I have so far!

"Cuz you were my lucky guide,
that in the shattered me,
your aim was so perfect that you hit it immediately~
My heart?
the one thats empty and bleeding,
my own blood is on my hands
thanks to your hellbound actions
in this situation, there's no god to speak of
because you were my devil in disguise,

I saw stars shining in your eyes
heaven was in your touch but hell is in your hands

(plz I'm open to any opinions, especially feedback on how I can get better)