Question

Can I have some feedback on my letter

Answer 1

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Answer 2

I don’t know how to say this to anyone. I can’t lose them, not again. Everything I’m feeling is swirling inside me. I can’t go on like this, knowing that the ones I love dearly are leaving. Why must me say good-bye all the time? Why can’t we say hello more often? Must I go on living like my heart is complete. When I see them smile my heart jumps for joy. When I’m mad at them I’m mean. I regret every terrible thing I did to them. I want to gather them in my arms and just hold them and never let go. When they are sad I feel sorry for them and comfort them. When they are scared I hold them until they feel safe again. They are leaving now and there is nothing I can do about it. I will truly miss them with all my heart. I lay everything to you God. They are yours not mine, I know you love them as much as I do. Please keep them safe and secure. Please make sure they are in a good home. They are in your arms Father. Quintan and Keanna I love you both so much. You two will always be my little brother and sister. I will never forget you as long as I live. You brought me joy, happiness, and love. I will hold onto your beautiful smiles. You will be close to my heart forever. Be brave and remember you are loved not just by the family or me but by God himself. Never let go of your dreams. Try you best and be good. I will see you again soon. Not as soon as we would like but very soon we will meet. Even if it takes a lifetime. I love you two. Don’t be afraid to go. Some one smart said, “No one can change the past, but you can change the future.” So I leave both of you with that message. Heed what I wrote you and you will go very far in life. You can over-come any hindrance as long as you believe in yourself.

Answer 3

It's a very sweet letter. I've changed a little of the wording, and some punctuation. Here it is...

I don’t know how to say this. I can’t lose them, not again. My feelings are swirling inside me. I can’t go on like this, knowing that the ones I love dearly are leaving. Why must we say good-bye all the time? Why can’t we say hello more often? Must I go on living like my heart is complete?

When I see them smile my heart jumps for joy. When I’m mad at them, I’m mean. I regret every terrible thing I did to them. I want to gather them in my arms, and never let go. When they are sad, I comfort them. When they are scared I hold them until they feel safe again. They are leaving now, and there is nothing I can do about it. I will truly miss them with all my heart.

I lay everything to you God. They are yours, not mine. I know you love them as much as I do. Please keep them safe and secure. Please make sure they are in a good home. They are in your arms Father.

Quintan and Keanna, I love you both so much. You two will always be my little brother and sister. I will never forget you, as long as I live. You brought me joy, happiness, and love. I will hold onto your beautiful smiles. You will be close to my heart forever. Be brave, and remember you are loved, not just by the family, or me, but by God himself. Never let go of your dreams. Try you best, and be good. I will see you again soon. Not as soon as we would like, but very soon we will meet again. Even if it takes a lifetime. I love you two. Don’t be afraid to go. Some one smart said, “No one can change the past, but you can change the future.” So, I leave both of you with that message. Heed what I wrote, and you will go very far in life. You can over-come any hindrance as long as you believe in yourself.

Answer 4

thank you u have made it perfect