Question

This is my poem.
please correct all the mistakes that I made
and help me in improving it.
I am not good in writing poem.
:)

Answer 1

The title is " The happiness of Success"

Fear to the unknown
tired of all the failures
regret to the things I missed
Creating many mistakes

You must not give up
You should strive hard
to achieve your desired goal
giving you a feeling of fulfillment

Inspiration give you determination
to continue in achieving your goal



Don't be afraid in exploring new ideas
for it will give you a fresh knowledge



At the end of all the obstacles you fought
You will enjoy the happiness of success



It should be a poem with 5 stanzas of 4 lines

Answer 2

try to write about the drying human initiative and our being trapped in an illusion of the truth

Answer 3

moon pls reply

Answer 4

ur line of inspiration can be modified..

Answer 5

I'm back now. My teacher said that we should write a poem about our success

Answer 6

ok....
success can be in the wordly or material sense...

Answer 7

to be successful u need a source of inspiration which can be a thought eg.marxism ,a man eg gandhi, or god....

Answer 8

Did I made any grammatical mistakes?

Answer 9

for eg....walking on the street of life
being alone in the meddling crowd
i keep on trying to find a light
which can lead me to a eternal life

Answer 10

no , u were fine with the grammar

Answer 11

how was my poetry?

Answer 12

challenges,hindrances keep on coming
but i m a rock still and steady,
this world is just a faction of the
universe that guides me

Answer 13

i used a metaphor of a rock

Answer 14

Your poetry is good.

Answer 15

I just need to fill up the missing lines.

Answer 16

what are those line?

Answer 17

it should have four lines

Answer 18

could you give me an idea what to add?

Answer 19

ok.....the goal may be a distant dream
but u are a survivor not a broken soul

Answer 20

ideas are the seeds of a bright future
full of prosperity and life

Answer 21

inspiration gives you determination
to continue in achieving your goal
Let not haters stop you in achieving your dream
otherwise make them as your inspiration


Don't be afraid in exploring new ideas
for it will give you a fresh knowledge



At the end of all the obstacles you fought
You will enjoy the happiness of success

Answer 22

I added "Let not haters stop you in achieving your dream
otherwise make them as your inspiration"
could you improve it
I think it sounds bad :)

Answer 23

let not ur critics hinder u from achieving ur goals
take inspiration from the good present in them

Answer 24

Thanks for that. That is the word that I am looking for. ^_^

Answer 25

ok.......now what?

Answer 26

u are in which grade?

Answer 27

4th year high school, I am not that good in English and I am not a Native English speaker

Answer 28

inspiration gives you determination
to continue in achieving your goal
Let not haters stop you in achieving your dream
otherwise make them as your inspiration


Don't be afraid in exploring new ideas
for it will give you a fresh knowledge
Don't be afraid to ask someone for help
For they are here to help you


After all the challenges, and hindrances
You have surpassed
You will realize that anything is possible
If you just have perseverance and determination


I already added some lines. could you Improve it?