Question

Can someone help me close my research paper?

Answer 1

Here it is :)

Answer 2

It's pretty good. But to be better, I would remove most of the rhetorical questions, not use contractions. You also have a few non-sentences which would read better as a complete sentence.

Here's one way to sum up
The next time you are assaulted by mosquitos, their wings buzzing at 500 beats per second(7) in your ear, remember what a difficult path they had to take, surviving against long odds to seek out one refreshing drink (you can spare a drop of blood) to continue a cycle first started 100 million years ago (get reference to when mosquitoes first appeared)

Answer 3

Don't quote me on the 100 million years. Get the real number.

Also, in the opening you mention stingers. Is it a stinger or some kind of proboscis

Answer 4

Oh true, I see what you mean

Answer 5

You have awkward statements such as
For example, the Wyeomyia mosquito larvae are able to freeze themselves over the winter until they can hatch in the spring (1).

They don't "freeze themselves", they survive in a frozen state. So:

For example, the Wyeomyia mosquito larvae survive over the winter in a frozen until they thaw in the spring, and hatch into a larva(1).

Answer 6

*frozen state

Answer 7

Mm, I'm not really good at this :P Thanks :) I'll start fixing it right now

Answer 8

You are very good, but could be better.

Answer 9

Yea, I know, I appreciate you helping me :D

Answer 10

sometimes you use words that are too general
The anticoagulant helps the blood to flow freely for the mosquito while it gets its meal.

"gets" is too general (sounds like it went to the local McD to get its meal). imbibe is more specific

Answer 11

Wow! I've never heard imbibe before :D It sounds cool

Answer 12

in the #2 paragraph, I would replace some of the "suck" with synonyms, just to have it read better.

Example
After sucking up one full meal of blood, a female mosquito can lay up to about 240 eggs from the nutrients in the blood (2).

After a filling meal of blood, a female....

Answer 13

Believe it or not, it’s only the females that drink our blood. Males only extract the nectar from plants and so do females, but they also consume blood to make more eggs (1). How's that?

Answer 14

when you say
they molt and shed their skin making it possible for more growth to occur

molt means "shed skin" so if you want to explain molt means shed their skin

they molt (shed their skin -reference to molting) making it possible for more growth to occur.
and stick in a reference to molting (in general, not just mosquitoes)

Answer 15

So, "After each instar, they molt (shed their skin) making it possible for more growth to occur (1)." And then I put a link to what molting is? like: (1, 5) ?

Answer 16

That'd be link 8 so it'd be: After each instar, they molt (shed their skin) making it possible for more growth to occur (1,8).

Answer 17

don't use it's. But otherwise, ok.

How about: Males subsist exclusively on nectar from plants. Females will also drink nectar, but they are preferential to blood, to make more eggs.

Answer 18

yes to molt comment.

Answer 19

Mmk, I'll fix that

Answer 20

You may not have my vocabulary...

Answer 21

yea, I'll have to edit it a little bit :P

Answer 22

Male mosquito's diet exclusively consist of the nectar from plants. Females will also drink nectar, but they are preferential to blood, to make more eggs. How about that?

Answer 23

very nice, except diet is a verb as well as a noun, so it is hard to parse I wanted to read it as mosquitoes diet exclusively on nectar (diet as a verb).
If you rewrite it so it becomes more obvious you mean diet (noun) For example
The diet of a male mosquito consists exclusively of nectar from plants.

Answer 24

Ok :)

Answer 25

I searched when Mosquitos were in the world, and I got a website saying there were here for 100 million years, but they said that based on Jurassic Park :/

Answer 26

I went on the website "How Stuff Works" and they said they've been here for 30 million years, should I use this site?

Answer 27

In #5 It probably seems like every female’s goal is to make more blood-sucking monsters to make your life miserable, doesn’t it? That’s one way to put it.

These two sentences don't fit it..

You have
Get blood and reproduce so that the cycle can start all over again. (btw, make this a real sentence) .
a different sentence here...How are mosquitos able to draw blood from their host?
Do you ever wonder why you never feel them sucking your blood?

Answer 28

Which two sentences? The one above or the ones on the bottom?

Answer 29

The ones above. They were in between the two at the bottom.

btw, http://www.metapathogen.com/mosquito/
hopefully there is a better source.

Answer 30

I don't really understand what I should od with the two sentences below...I'm supposed to take out the top sentences right? And make the top sentence on the bottom a real setence correct?

Answer 31

sentence*

Answer 32

I'm saying
It probably seems like every female’s goal is to make more blood-sucking monsters to make your life miserable, doesn’t it? That’s one way to put it.

should be moved to, for example, the last summary paragraph. Replace them with
something like
How are mosquitos able to draw blood from their host?

Answer 33

ohh ok

Answer 34

#8
is highly preferable by mosquitos
should be
is highly preferable to mosquitos

Answer 35

Mmk

Answer 36

It probably seems like every female’s goal is to make more blood-sucking monsters to make your life miserable, doesn’t it? That’s one way to put it. The next time you are assaulted by mosquitos, their wings buzzing at 500 beats per second (7) in your ear, remember what a difficult path they had to take. They have to survive against long odds to seek out one refreshing drink (you can spare a drop of blood) to continue a cycle first started as early as 250 million years ago (9).

How's that?

Answer 37

Mosquitos will also appeal to the smell

The smell appeals to mosquitos (not the other way round)

Answer 38

I also replaced the sentence like you said where it had the "main goal of female mosquitoes" thing: Do you ever wonder why you never feel them sucking your blood? That’s because humans aren’t the only ones with anesthetics.

Answer 39

They have to survive
should be
They have had to survive

Answer 40

You mean here? Mosquitos will also appeal to the smell of uric (urine) acid (4).

Answer 41

yes. appeal : 3 be attractive or interesting

Answer 42

ohhh

Answer 43

"The smell of uric (urine) acid also appeals to mosquitoes (4) " Like that?

Answer 44

yes, it makes sense.

got to go. But keep polishing it. Mark Twain said "strike out every other word, even if it breaks your heart." He know how to write.

Answer 45

Thank you so much! I appreciate it :)