Question

Is this sentence confusing?
People who have a high level of cholesterol, or steroids, on the surface of their skin tend to attract more mosquitos (4).

Earlier, someone said that it was confusing since you wouldn't know if it was both (as in cholesterol and steroids) or either one. Is it still like that?

Answer 1

i think it sounds good, its not confusing

Answer 2

Thank you!

Answer 3

np

Answer 4

IT was recently People who have a high level of cholesterol or steroids on the surface of their skin tend to attract more mosquitos (4). (I just took away the commas) so that fixed it right?

Answer 5

It was recently people who have a high level of cholesterol or steroids on the surface of their skin tend to attract more mosquito's.

Answer 6

Oops, I forgot the apostrophes: It was recently: "People who have a high level of cholesterol or steroids on the surface of their skin tend to attract more mosquitos (4)."

Answer 7

"People who have a high level of cholesterol or steroids on the surface of their skin tend to attract more mosquito's." also, put the commas back in...

Answer 8

Ok :) Thank you!

Answer 9

np

Answer 10

Could I ask you one more question?

Answer 11

sure, lol

Answer 12

(That was my research paper) and I need to make sure I cited my works correctly. Could you check them?

Answer 13

yeah

Answer 14

1. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mosquito#Feeding_habits_of_adults

2. http://sharkarama.hubpages.com/hub/mosquitolifecycle

3. http://www.pca.state.mn.us/index.php/living-green/living-green-citizen/for-kids/creature-feature/mosquito.html

4. http://www.webmd.com/allergies/features/are-you-mosquito-magnet

5. Spielman, Andrew. Mosquito: A Natural History of Our Most Persistent and Deadly Foe. New York: Hyperion, 2001. Print.

6. http://www.buzzle.com/articles/mosquito-repellent-plants.html

7. Spielman, Andrew. Mosquito: The Story of Man's Deadliest Foe. New York: Hyperion, 2002. Print.

8. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Molt

9. http://www.metapathogen.com/mosquito/

Answer 15

ok, so what were u asking? lol

Answer 16

I wanted to make sure that the cited works up there^ are correctly cited

Answer 17

yes

Answer 18

Thanks :)

Answer 19

One...last question...?

Answer 20

ok

Answer 21

(Honestly is the last one :P)

Answer 22

ok

Answer 23

How can I close this paragraph?

#10 It probably seems like every female mosquito’s goal is to make more blood-sucking monsters to make your life miserable, doesn’t it? That’s one way to put it. The next time you are assaulted by mosquitos, their wings buzzing at 500 beats per second in your ear, remember what a difficult path they had to take to reach you (7). They have had to survive against long odds to seek out one refreshing drink (you can spare a drop of blood) to continue a cycle first started as early as 250 million years ago (9). ---> this is kinda irrelevant I know: True, mosquitos seem to be an ever-present annoyance, but think about it. If you had survived the many predators waiting to make a meal of you throughout your entire life and then, just as you were arriving at the meal you needed to continue your lineage, your life was carelessly ended by a single flick of a human finger.

Answer 24

It's my conclusion paragraph

Answer 25

just add, like, so just spare some of your blood, and save a life.

Answer 26

Well, most likely, we wouldn't want to save their lives considering they could spread diseases :P

Answer 27

see, like when i get skeeto bites, i dont kill em, lol i mean there not doing n e thing wrong, there just thirsty. lmao... soon theyll be on there way to someone new.. why kill em

Answer 28

Do you tihnk the whole thing is a little irrelevant since I talked about how much they b other the person now I'm saying don't bother mosquitos

Answer 29

yeah

Answer 30

so what should I do? (I'm going to go eat, but I'll be back soon)

Answer 31

stick to one side of your story, choose one thats easier to write for, and same here, thats why i left, to go get food xD lol

Answer 32

With respect to your original question, about this sentence --

People who have a high level of cholesterol, or steroids, on the surface of their skin tend to attract more mosquitos (4).

This use of the commas (called the appositional "or") tells me that "steroids" is another way of saying "cholesterol." Is that correct? If the two terms are not synonymous (and I have never heard that they are), then the commas are incorrect.

In that case, the sentence ought to be instead this --

People who have high levels of either cholesterol or steroids on the surface of their skin tend to attract more mosquitos (4).

Answer 33

Ohhh

Answer 34

Ok, thanks!