Question

Someone Plz grade my paper and be honest :)

Answer 1

"There were laws prohibiting blacks from having certain rights which lead to Civil Rights Movements, consequently, cause violence and chaos. "

Correct to : "There were laws prohibiting blacks from having certain rights which lead to Civil Rights Movements, and consequently, caused violence and chaos. "

(Still reading...)

Answer 2

"African Americans are threatened by groups if they did not follow the law or rules. In the book The Help by Kathryn Stockett, she shows how racism and discrimination destroys the chance to achieve the American dream for African Americans."

Change to : "African Americans were threatened by groups if they did not follow these descrimanatory laws. In the book The Help, Kathryn Stockett shows how racism and descrimination destroyed the chances to an American Dream for most African Americans."

Answer 3

r u done reading?

Answer 4

and thank you for the corrects.

Answer 5

If your in highschool the paper is an A, if your in college the paper is a B, unless your teacher is an a**. If oyur teacher is an a** wait here so I can continue giving you corrects and raise that grade :)

Answer 6

Im in High School hahah... and my teacher well she's a B**** :'D...

Answer 7

The passage of the Fourteenth Amendment and Fifteenth Amendment made African Americans citizens and recognized that black men had the right to vote.

Change to: "The passage of the Fourteenth and Fifteenth Amendment recognized all African American men with the right to vote."

Answer 8

Ok, well if she's a bi*ch, wait until I give you all the corrects. But honestly, I see no reason this paper deserves no less than an A.

Answer 9

When my class mates where grading it they said that my topic's are extermely alike and its its hard to identifie which topic im talking about in each paragraph and my i have to talk about racism and discrimination for twice

Answer 10

I have 4 paragraphs i have to talk about the literature part of the book and then the historical

Answer 11

so for my paper i did historical first then i did lit and the hit of my other topic and then lit

Answer 12

You cited all your historical facts, and cited your quotes from the book. No one can argue with what you wrote in those sections as long as you cited.

In your analyzation, well, it's pure analyzation, its your opinion. It can't be argued. Everything seems perfect to me, your writing gets clearer and much better from middle to end. That is rare, usually it's the opposite. Good work, I felt like I know the book even though I havn't read it.

Answer 13

It's very easy to see the difference in my opinion. You start of by introducing me to the time (1950-60), you set the mood. You show me how it was for African Americans and how prevalent racism was. Perfect! Then you hit me with the historical facts to justify yourself (This is the part no one can argue). Then you show me how you felt about the book and did some quote analysis (which no one can argue against). It's an A.

Answer 14

Is there anything you feel is off and specifically want my help on?

Answer 15

Hell ya! you dont understand how hard i worked on this made my day. I know in college u only have like five minutes to right eassys so im trying to improve haha.

Answer 16

you are the nicest editer iv ever met :) haha

Answer 17

What throws me off the most is determining which topic im talking about for each paragraph hah...

Answer 18

where it says "African Americans are threatened by groups if they did not follow the law or rules. In the book The Help by Kathryn Stockett, she shows how racism and discrimination destroys the chance to achieve the American dream for African Americans." thats a quote so i dont change it

Answer 19

Thank you. In return all I want is for you to send me message with the grade you received once it's graded.

Here's a tip; When you cite something, it's "un-arguable" meaning you cannot get points taken off for it (unless you cited incorrectly). So a good idea is to cite something, THEN analyze the citation with your own opinion (which also can't be argued), and BAM you have a double wammy.

Keep up the good work.

Answer 20

Don't change it then, your paper is fine. It most definetly should be an A.

Answer 21

I liked your ending by the way.

Answer 22

really my teacher said it should be longer... :/

Answer 23

My viewer condenses the paper into about a page. How long is it?

Answer 24

I will I have an A in the class and i want to keep it that way.

Answer 25

like hald maybe less :/

Answer 26

What?

Answer 27

Kathryn Stockett was a brave woman to take on the pressure of making people sees both sides of race in her book. Society is now out of a time where prejudice is obvious. It lurks silently until it strikes the world with horror. Courageous authors like Stockett now come a dime a dozen and barely speak up for the indiscretion of racial tension. It will take more than just The Help of a novel to end the haunting of discrimination.

Answer 28

half*

Answer 29

Yup, great ending.

And sorry, I don't understand. How many exact pages is your paper?

Answer 30

4-6 i kinda over achived lol i want an A so bad but for the ending it has to be at least half a page i hope she doesnt deduct points cuz its short or somthing.

Answer 31

each paragraph must be a page and i did that and for the intro there has to be a lit para and a historical para and must be at least one page did that aswell

Answer 32

Make sure your paper is double spaced (2.0) and the font size is atleast 12. You can put it to 13, no one will notice ;)

Answer 33

haha thx for the advice ;) (to bad my teacher would probably messure the size...) lol

Answer 34

ya i did it just was sent funny? its in MLA and formated correctly my mac computer is just weird

Answer 35

Look man, the paper is great. Your teacher is truly a bit*h if she gives you anything less than an A. If she's that way in highschool, I'd seriously advise you talking to your prinicple. Tell the principle you and that teacher have 'personality conflicts' and that you 'don't feel comfortable' in the class. It worked for me ;) Have a good night, send me the grade you get alright? See ya!

Answer 36

Will do thx :)

Answer 37

Well Matt6288, first, I'd like to tell you a little about me. I am a very harsh grader. I am very nitpicky and go after every little thing. So it is often advisable for the receiver to add some points on to the score i would typically give them to get their true score. I have read and reviewed your paper.

Some things I noticed for improvement:
1) vary sentence structure
2) use commas - there were SEVERAL instances in which I inserted them
3) be careful about word choices and grammar when using lead-ins from the novel
4) proofread aloud

Some things I liked:
1) thesis and topic sentences were clear
2) groups were fairly well organized
3) flow was decent

Overall grade: 85. The content was excellent. The conveyance could use a little bit of work. Best of luck! :)