Question

I am planning to take the GMAT exam, so I need to improve my writing skills. I would appreciate it if someone would help me regarding my writings.

Answer 1

Sure. Is this essay-writing you need help with? I can help with that and also grammar (if there's some sort of section for that)

Answer 2

Please find the attachment. Thank you so much for your help.

Answer 3

Does the test supply you an article, for you to make a responding argument?

Answer 4

The only topic you can see is in yellow color. There is not any extra article in the exam.

Answer 5

Ok, here are some things I notice/observe about your writing (assuming it's the same format as the SAT writing section):
- It's a bit redundant to restate that what the article says so closely; the person grading your essay will be fully aware of the content. If you can, just condense the background you supply about; this will also give you more writing time.
- Your thesis statement should possibly be more condensed to encompass each main part of your arguments, or describe an overall trend. (For example: 'I like fruit' as a thesis statement' with the arguments as 'I like oranges', 'I like apples' and example. Or to state ideas: 'The fruits oranges and apples have distinguishable merit) (silly analogy, yes)

Answer 6

Body paragraphs:
- You should avoid stating 'first, second, third', and instead find/build relationships between the ideas that allows you to say 'Similarly' or 'Aversely' and etc; this makes your idea seem to flow more, and is more convincing.
- You have really good examples that are concrete, and paired with good vocabulary, you seem really professional. It works well.
- Avoid 'maybe' or words that seem unsure, you want to sound as knowledgeable as possible, like you really know the material and your own stance.
- Your strongest argument should be last, you want to build up to it to finish strong

Answer 7

Conclusion seems fine, and should improve slightly when other minor issues are taken care of.
Well, I hope that helped somewhat. I think you did well, but those are just some things you could improve on. :) Good luck!

Answer 8

thank you so much , could you please help me with correcting one of my essay and let me know the words that I can use instead of mine. whenever you have time please let me know them. thank you very very much for your help.

Answer 9

contact the school they usually have review classes specifically designated for the test to help boost your score.

Answer 10

THank you for your comment :) I will do that .

Answer 11

Sure, if you need help correcting an essay, I would be happy to look at it when I have time available. :)

Answer 12

Would you please look at this one too and let me know your comments as well.