What’s wrong with this sentence?
We want to present to you this award for the achievement of excellence.

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What’s wrong with this sentence?
We want to present to you this award for the achievement of excellence.

lgbasallote · Answer

hmm i don't seem to see anything wrong...but if there is...it would probably be the excessive use of "to". There probably shouldn't be a "to" before you

anonymous · Answer

I just thought of something for the last question. 
Maybe the sentence should be corrected as "The first batch test results were closer to specification than the second batch results." in order to make the comparison more sound. What do you think?

anonymous · Answer

I would rewrite the first one as "We want to present you with this award for the achievement of excellence."

The second should maybe be:
"The first batch of test results were closer to the specification than the second batch of results."

anonymous · Answer

Thank you for your reply!
Can I do "The test results of the first batch were close to the specification than the ones of the second batch"?

anonymous · Answer

You are presenting an 'award' so: We want to present this award to you for ....

anonymous · Answer

Yes Yuko, that would be fine.