Question

Hows my poem?

Answer 1

One last time I look at the past.
Memories and emotions flood my sight.
Death, hate, depression.
One last time I see the world through the eyes of the lost.
One last time morals become a standard.
One last time, before I become a stranger, a corpse.
A corpse with nothing to hold.

Answer 2

I like it one thing i would suggest is putting one line after "One last time" like...
"One last time i see the world through the eyes of the lost,
the agony and dispair they faced for all their lost cause
One last time orals became a standard
......"
So on and so on... thats a good start tho! :) I love poetry i wish you could see mine :)

Answer 3

*morals
sorry i put "orals" :P

Answer 4

haha i like that add on. but im not gunna use it cuz its your of course. send me some! i have more around this site too.

Answer 5

Haha how about i give you permission to use it :) Haha id love to but not tonight :) Awesome!!

Answer 6

haha yes! haha jk. its all good next time!

Answer 7

Haha i honestly dont mind if you use it i was just helping :) Haha great!

Answer 8

haha naw i try not to bite off of people.

Answer 9

The sun walking out on my life
Leaving my world cold, dark, and grim.
The roses die,
They will never grow again,
For they have left me too.
I feel if I could
I would leave myself,
Like the mother leaving a father.
But I am the balloon,
I will rise only if
The air of hope and joy
Pushes me up.

Answer 10

I like it :) you should get them published :)

Answer 11

everyone tells me that but i kinda wanna but i kinda dont want to

Answer 12

Its great if you do :) Try it!

Answer 13

haha ima just see how much can i write. but i must get better.

Answer 14

True :) well good luck to you! if you need any more advice i am here :)

Answer 15

haha alright thanks and yourself too!

Answer 16

Great!! :) thanks :)

Answer 17

btw should i write sad emo poems or happy ones? cuz i have those too.

Answer 18

Haha thats really up to you :)

Answer 19

haha not gunna answer huh?

Answer 20

Haha i just think it would be your decision to that :)

Answer 21

haha im torn between them

Answer 22

Write both at equal amounts ;)

Answer 23

haha good idea.

Answer 24

lemme see if i can post another.

Answer 25

Great! ill get back to you on that tomorrow i am headed to bed good night :)

Answer 26

haha ok goodnight!

Answer 27

NIGHT! :)

Answer 28

NO. ITS MORNING IN HALF THE WORLD SO ITS GOOD MORNING/NIGHT!

Answer 29

I like it (: and no its not too gloomy, its your form of expression so its perfect.

Answer 30

haha thanks.