Question

Can someone help me fix and check my thesis statement. 'The hardest decisions that I ever faced in my teenage years was about my future.'

Answer 1

Since "decisions" is plural, you should have "were" instead of "was".

Answer 2

I don't like it as a thesis. Sorry.
What is the paper about, exactly? Will you be discussing these decisions? What were they? I just need a little more information.
Thanks.

Answer 3

People hardly ever make decisions about their past, unless it is to hide it (or from it). Decisions about the future (personal or communal) are based on assumptions, since the future is hidden from us. Thus the context of the difficulty has to be gauged in the same balance in which we weigh our assumptions. Your statement, I believe, is incomplete in itself. If you were asked to complete it and write a these on it, for example, " The hardest decisions of my life_______" then I would suggest you find a different filler. Look inside, and you'd remember the hardest decision you ever made. It doesn't have to be something deep and profound, you will find that most things in life, rarely are. Pick something that is true to your heart and satisfies more than just a grade criterion. Cheerio!

Answer 4

you should add a little more detail in to it and say what you think

Answer 5

The hardest decision a high school student has to make will set the tone for his future.

Answer 6

Your thesis tells us what the topic is - the difficult decisions you made about your future. However, good writing "shows" and doesn't "tell".

For example, which of the following thesis is more interesting to the reader: 'The hardest decisions that I ever faced in my teenage years were about my future' or 'At 16 I had no clue whether I would go to college, join the army, or run away with the circus' ?

The second thesis statement shows us that you faced difficult decisions at a young age without directly saying so. Readers don't want to read a list of statements, they want to hear a story about you. Try showing us and not telling us.

Answer 7

I think that your thesis statement would be more free to explore if it were more general. The current statement sort of paints you into a corner with little area for fine tuning and delving into deeper. You might consider using a broader statement while making the current statement part of that broader statement. Good Luck. Let me know how it turns out; I would be interested to know.