How can I make the hook of my paper more interesting?

The original beginning was: "Never in a world of technology did the idea of touching, typing, and multitasking was ever possible on a portable device."

I'm so lost right now, it'd be nice if anyone could help.

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How can I make the hook of my paper more interesting?

The original beginning was: "Never in a world of technology did the idea of touching, typing, and multitasking was ever possible on a portable device."

I'm so lost right now, it'd be nice if anyone could help.

anonymous · Answer

Maybe try rewording it?

How about
"Never, even in a world of technology, did the idea of touching, typing, and multitasking seem possible on a portable device."

I think, overall, it is good at catching the reader's attention and I honestly would be interested to read more with a little different wording. :)

anonymous · Answer

Really? Thank you so much! I'll try rewording it. I was having trouble with it and it gets hard when you're trying to be creative and impress the teacher at the same time, or else she won't grade the paper, lol.

anonymous · Answer

You're welcome.
Yeah, it can definitely be difficult at times. I know from experience. xD

anonymous · Answer

Would, "In 2010, the most advanced, portable, attention-grabbing device was invented - and no, it wasn't a phone." work?

anonymous · Answer

Ooh, I really like that.