Question

How's this poem?

Answer 1

As the cold winter shoos away the warmth from me,
I felt so alone.
The last moments of sun and warm were gone.
My heart seemed to go with it.
It was first troubled.
Then it was hurt.
Then little by little it disappeared
But I tell myself, it’ll be back
Just as the seasons do
But winter will be back also…
I better wear a jacket.

Answer 2

omg...this was so deep. I think I'm tearing up. BRA-VO!

Answer 3

I'm kidding.. :P
But, it was really good.

Answer 4

haha thanks... i have more but yeah...

Answer 5

wow was a really good poem i cant rite poems for nothing lol

Answer 6

try!

Answer 7

A suggestion: "troubled" and "hurt" are big concepts, and kind of trite in a poem. See if you can't find a better way to really describe the feelings.

Other than that, I liked it! The last line is awesome.

Answer 8

haha i'll try someday just a little practice and a little help