What do you think of this so far?

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anonymous · Answer

Shana allowed her feet to mold against the coarse sand, slowly picking up her pace as she went. She stopped when she was at her special spot, where she couldn’t go any further due to the fact that the grainy sand turned into thick stones. She sat quietly on the edge of the shore, and let her thoughts wander as the tips of the frothy waves tickled her toes.

anonymous · Answer

It's really good!

anonymous · Answer

Very good, is this going to be a short story?

anonymous · Answer

Yes it's a short story.

anonymous · Answer

anything you'd change?

anonymous · Answer

It's pretty much perfect, of course if you wanted to change it then you don't really need "allowed" it could just be "let", so it would be "Shana let her feet  mold against the coarse sand".

anonymous · Answer

This definitely has potential, so see it through, i'd love to read it.

anonymous · Answer

its good

comm.dan · Answer

Holy crud this is very good writing, I could only write like that if I took the time, too.