Question

I'm writing an argument essay and the question, is corporal punishment an appropriate parent discipline technique? Is my thesis statement ok. Corporal punishment can be used in an effective way for the parent to discipline there children if they don't abuse the child, so the reason kids are how they are now is because there not getting discipline properly by parents.

Answer 1

That thesis statement is a run-on sentence. I suggest you revise it so that it is more concise and straightforward. The thesis statement should be:

TOPIC.......X, Y, and Z.

This means that the you talk about the topic with X, Y, and Z being your sub-topics of focus. These sub-topics would be separated in its own paragraph, for a total of 3.

If you are still stumped, look at this revised thesis I made from your thesis statement:

THESIS: Corporal punishment can be used in an effective way for the parent to discipline there children by prohibition of abuse practice on the child, implementation of discipline measures, and the promotion of positive interactions.

Answer 2

Thank you!

Answer 3

Please post it in the Writing group, thank you!