Question

Can someone please edit this and tell me what to cut out!!! it doesn't make sense

Answer 1

Similarily in wingspaninson’s ‘I had

what's 'I mean ?

Answer 2

wingspaninson’s is not a word

Answer 3

oh it didn't come up right
its one of Emily's D poem - her surname wont come up

Answer 4

the author portrays a desire for social acceptance which

acceptance which should be (acceptance, which) or (acceptance that )

Answer 5

'I did not know the ample bread, t'was so unlike the

( 'I ) and ( t'was ) doesn't make any sense

Answer 6

does this one sound better ?

Answer 7

Similarily is not a word, are you trying to write Similarly or Similarity

Answer 8

that was a quote btw

Answer 9

i often put my quotes "like this "

Answer 10

they are minor errors ill fix them -.-

Answer 11

oh i thought u wanted me to correct them XP

Answer 12

nah just read over it - i though there was too much like quote and all coming in

Answer 13

If you write a lot, your teacher will be proud

Answer 14

haha yeah i know but i feel like all of that doesn't make sense

Answer 15

you know the second big paragraph i sent, do u reckon that one sounds better ?

Answer 16

I'm thinking of sicking to that one

Answer 17

It sounds clearly than the first one

Answer 18

yeah that's what i thought, so ill keep that one and delete the first

Answer 19

the author portrays a desire for social acceptance which is transcended from the physical hunger for food which is ultimately rejected through a lack of understanding.

Answer 20

u know the transcended part and acceptance - what did u say to edit ? i dnt get it

Answer 21

it has a grammar error, it should be should be (acceptance, which) or (acceptance that )

Answer 22

so it can best fit in your sentence

Answer 23

ohh okay thanks :)

Answer 24

yw