Question

can some body read my story please. i dont know if its good or not. i could really use some helpful criticism.

Answer 1

ok

Answer 2

i will read it and come back with a reply.

Answer 3

Read it. Pardon me for the late lament, but oh here it goes.

It's a lovely piece as from what I can infer. But, I think you should put in some research in paranormal before going into the discripts.

There are people who practice this form, mind you. Shamans/ Pagans/ Cardinals/ Divinators/ Sadhus... lots of people. And some (Dark Tantra) do as your story. But the procedure and Lovecraft-esque descript ought to make it more interesting.

Instead of the first person, the narrative would have sounded more interesting in third person, y'know. Not knowing what exactly in protagonists heal while events happen.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Horla

This is one of my favourite stories in the genre, mind you. May help. (thumbs up)

I love your idea, but the structure... I hope this is the first draft.

Answer 4

ok thank you