Question

I created a sentence for English class using the word pallor. Is this grammatically correct? Would I need a comma after deer? I'm sorry I'm not very good at this -_-

The pallor of the little girl’s face indicated that she had just seen a terrible sight -- a carcass of a dead deer while frolicking in the woods.

or

The pallor of the little girl’s face indicated that she had just seen a terrible sight -- a carcass of a dead deer, while frolicking in the woods.

Answer 1

The second sentence is grammatically correct

Answer 2

Thank you very much.

Answer 3

You're very welcome !