Is this a good Persuasive Book for a novel?

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anonymous · Answer

Fighting for your life to survive the hard journey face in your path.  you're heart stops when you see the monster standing tall infront of you. If this is the kind of books your into then you'll love "The Journey  Faced". This book is all about Adventure's, Danger, and Mistery's.
Read for more breath taking danger that lays ahead...  

This adventure is the most explosive adventure you'll ever see/hear. When you hear the roars of this monster you heard about but never seen. Your facing the most biggest durable adventure of all time. You look back and the doors slam shut. You look around to see if some ones there, but all you see is black and coldness.

Dangerous traps were hidden and placed. People say a man went in and never returned. You start thinking about how scared you are and how will you survive. You spot a torch, you're lucky you have a match. You walk into the cave not knowing what death traps lay ahead. 

Mystery's that need to be found,and seen. You see something written on stone saying "Thee whom enter must face death of the monster that lies ahead, and whom kills the monster shall be set free". You think 'this is up to me" And walk ahead into the monster that awakens.

Fighting is all you need to survive. Adventure, danger, and mysterys are waiting for you. If you liked what you read so far check out our book "The Jorneys Faced". You wil be amazed what jornys lie ahead.

anonymous · Answer

I think it is a great persuasive book for a novel. Good choice.

anonymous · Answer

well i wrote it and thx :)

anonymous · Answer

Work on your grammar. Also put some work on how your sentences and paragraphs connect with each other, that's incredibly important when you're trying to convince someone, or when writing a good text in general. Try to add some cause/consequence relations and increase the mystery by adding a mysterious fact or happening, leaving things to the imagination of the reader. (You did that when you wrote that ''a man went it and never returned'', perhaps you could work on that a bit.) Overall, I enjoyed the way you triggered emotions of all kinds on your sentences, even if they didn't connect very well with each other; you'd be a good horror story writer. ;)

anonymous · Answer

Thank you !! ill do my wery best to make it better and Thanks XD maybe i will be a horror story writer :) but thx any way!