Question

I need feedback on a story I wrote.

Answer 1

I read the first two paragraphs and it's already a little repetitive :/ it's kind of hard to make out exactly what you're trying to say, you have to put your thoughts together and organize them a little more.

Answer 2

I read the whole thing, and this is really just scattered all of the place, ad very hard to understand. If you want i'll help you re-write it.

Answer 3

could you help me edit it? And fix it

Answer 4

yes :)

Answer 5

did you?

Answer 6

I'm assuming she did because its not reapting that much but its really good

Answer 7

If you want feedback and a place where people can read it, wattpad's a good place. You also can read a whole bunch of other stories there too.