Question

please help edit this

Answer 1

https://docs.google.com/document/d/19PSWstlyz1k1kWaqUmr_dLWLUsthfn4oQeFvb5XRPi4/edit

Answer 2

@Zale101 @zepdrix @BulletWithButterflyWings @thomaster @april115

Answer 3

@poopsiedoodle

Answer 4

I need to see the question first?

Answer 5

uggg atleast i have zale

Answer 6

there is no question i just need help editing my paper :)

Answer 7

Okay, i love editing

Answer 8

:)

Answer 9

but i cant judge how good i am, cuz u know, i'm a good critic

Answer 10

where is the paper?

Answer 11

Where you put "and she has gallbladder stones that needs serious" doesn't sound correct to me.
"needs" doesn't go well with the sentence so replace it with "need "

Answer 12

Where you write "He sits on the bed and hold Lilah’s hand tightly and started to say "
replace the word hold with holds.
"holds Lilah's hands"

Answer 13

where do you see this i dont see it can u indicate it or fix it with a different color?

Answer 14

in the second last paragraph:
2 days later after Lilah was starting to recover, Sam came into the room with his hands behind his back. Lilah was still sleeping at that moment. He sits on the bed and hold Lilah’s hand tightly and started to say

Answer 15

yeah what happened

Answer 16

the sentence above, u wrote: “ Its okay Lilah will be fine, Don't worry. Nothing will happen to Lilah. I promise!!!!” said Sams mom.

the word (its) means the possession of like for example (the dog caught its ball)
so replace it with "it's" as in "it is" so it best fits the sentence.

Answer 17

k

Answer 18

u can ctrl+f to find the sentence i'm telling u to fix.

Answer 19

Does that sound clear?
:)

Answer 20

its okay i found it also i need a title

Answer 21

Love at First sight, i think it's a good title

Answer 22

kk is edititng finshed zale?

Answer 23

not yet lol
your paper is too long, i need some time

Answer 24

sorry

Answer 25

areu still editing
sorry for asking it shows when u are editing ususally but not now

Answer 26

In the sentence u wrote, "Oh Sam I love you too, You are the sweetest person ever. I want to be with you also.”

"You" doesn't need to be capitalized..

Answer 27

cuz your putting a comma

Answer 28

kk gtg

Answer 29

See ya :)