Question

!!! One Medal Question !!!
can u help me and check if my report is containing everything from the question !

Answer 1

- Write a report of this event as if you were there. This means to write about the event in the present tense, as if it were happening now, and you are a witness to everything that is happening right before your eyes.
In your report, include the elements of 'setting' and describe the 'plot' as if you were there.

Answer 2

- this is my report -

A reporter called Maria attended the 85th Oscars 2013 and what she wrote was the same words as she wrote about the previous Oscars, Fantastic, Marvelous and Stunning. Maria was kind of bored writing almost the same reports every year, so she decided to go back to the year 1929 to attend the First Annual Academy Awards which was officially known by the name of “Oscars” and write a report about that.

The Annual Academy Awards were held at the Hollywood Roosevelt Hotel, which is located in the heart of Hollywood. 20s, Celebrities were shining the Red Carpet, especially Janet Gaynor as she got her leg out of her Rolls Royce, showing her silver, sparkly high heels, her fans and the paparazzi got crazy shouting and snapping her pictures. Maria the reporter herself got crazy because the celebs were looking outstanding, and they all had a different style sense.

As Maria entered the hall and got seated she saw the crowd was huge and the whole atmosphere was spectacular. As Maria was watching, the whole report was spinning into her head word by word. The stage was wonderful, it had a big statue of the gold trophy, a big screen and it got more wonderful when the stars were dazzling the stage!

At the end of the day Maria was proud to write her new style of report about the First Annual Academy Awards, the report went like this… 85 years have passed, but the first Annual Academy Awards were the most phenomenal awards of the years. The 85 years of golden glamour, which has divined us made us explore the ultimate Oscar timeline of past winners, memorable moments and juicy tidbits, celebrating every single year of the Academy Awards. The dazzle Queens and the dazzle kings just to name a few, Gloria Swanson, Emil Jannings and Louise Dresser were the best actors and actresses of the golden glamour years. A hit silver screen film called “Wings” won the Outstanding Picture award. The golden glamour 85 years exquisite moments has given us three words “Creative, Inspiration and Entertainment”…

Answer 3

@e.mccormick

Answer 4

Write a report of this event as if you were there. This means to write about the event in the \(\large\mathbf{present~tense,~ as~ if~ it~ were~ happening~ now}\), and \(\large\mathbf{you~ are~ a~ witness}\) to everything that is happening right before your eyes.

Note the first highlighted part of this. That means was, were, saw, and any other past tense references are not allowed!

Note the second highlighted part. This is a first hand account.

Rewrite from this perspective: You are there, on a cell phone, and describing it all to your friend. They can't see it, so they need you to describe it. And, they want you to be expressive. (So have your emotions spelled out in the description.)

Answer 5

so i need to rewrite the whole report again?

Answer 6

Unfortunately, it is not in the correct tense or person. You can keep the basic content, but the tense and person are not what that is saying you need.

The introduction is borderline. It helps set it up. But once the reporter goes back in time, this is her talking live about what she sees.

Answer 7

Here is an example:

Sorry to call you right now, but this is incredible. I have gone back in time and am at the Oscars! No, seriously, the Oscars. Before they renamed it to the Academy Awards. Oh, it is amazing. You should see this, but you can't, so let me tell you about it!

Answer 8

Okay for intense this line - At the end of the day Maria was proud to write her new style of report about the First Annual Academy Awards, the report went like this--

i have to take out maria and write - At the end of the day I was proud to write a new style...

Answer 9

Well, it is happening at that moment. So you can talk about what you will write in the future.

Oh, this has been such an incredible experience. I feel so proud I took this chance. I am going to write with a fresh style about this! Seeing all this glamor and the freshness of this wonderful, new event...

Answer 10

but this sentence is in future tense ? my report is past tense ...

Answer 11

Past tense is wrong. The assignment is for present tense.

Answer 12

what should i do now ?

Answer 13

Like I said, rework it in the present tense, as it it is a person who has gone back to that moment and is seeing it live. They are reporting back on it to the people they know.

It is said that, "A picture is worth a thousand words." You don't have a camera. So you must tell people what is happening. It is in the moment. It is what you see and smell and feel. It is the vibrate of the experience related in words:

Oh! My! God! You would not believe it. PITA would be so enraged if they were here! They are wearing fur. Real fur. A mink coat brushed up against me and you would not believe how it felt.

Note, I did use some past tense here. However, it is in the context of being in the last few moments and tied with present tense.

Answer 14

should i change the topic ?

Answer 15

Only if you want to. You could do the same basic thing and just set it as if you are there. Or you can start over. Because you already developed this, writing it in the present tense could be quicker. No need to do new research.

Answer 16

A reporter called Maria attended the 85th Oscars 2013 and what she wrote was the same words as she wrote about the previous Oscars, Fantastic, Marvelous and Stunning. Maria was kind of bored writing almost the same reports every year, so she decided to go back to the year 1929 to attend the First Annual Academy Awards which was officially known by the name of “Oscars” and write a report about that.

The Annual Academy Awards are going to be held at the Hollywood Roosevelt Hotel, which is located in the heart of Hollywood. 20s, Celebrities are shining the Red Carpet, especially Janet Gaynor as she got her leg out of her Rolls Royce, showing her silver, sparkly high heels, her fans and the paparazzi got crazy shouting and snapping her pictures. I, Maria the reporter got crazy because the celebs were looking outstanding, and they all had a different style sense.

As I entered the hall and got seated I saw the crowd was huge and the whole atmosphere was spectacular. While I was watching, the whole report was spinning into my head word by word. The stage was wonderful, it had a big statue of the gold trophy, a big screen and it got more wonderful when the stars were dazzling the stage!

At the end of the day I was proud to write my new style of report about the First Annual Academy Awards, the report went like this… 85 years have passed, but the first Annual Academy Awards were the most phenomenal awards of the years. The 85 years of golden glamour, which has divined us made us explore the ultimate Oscar timeline of past winners, memorable moments and juicy tidbits, celebrating every single year of the Academy Awards. The dazzle Queens and the dazzle kings just to name a few, Gloria Swanson, Emil Jannings and Louise Dresser were the best actors and actresses of the golden glamour years. A hit silver screen film called “Wings” won the Outstanding Picture award. The golden glamour 85 years exquisite moments has given us three words “Creative, Inspiration and Entertainment”…

Answer 17

Closer, but still being done in the past tense. The direction to "...write about the event in the present tense..." is explicit, so it can not be avoided.

Answer 18

where do i need to change the past into present ?

Answer 19

The problem is things like, "As I entered the hall and got seated I saw the crowd was huge ..." that is still past tense. The assignment is for a first person, present tense. An example of what they want:

http://blog.liviablackburne.com/2009/09/blue-first-person-present-tense-at-its.html

Answer 20

i should write : I entered the hall and i sat, I saw the crowd was huge...

Answer 21

Yes, and make it come alive with little tidbits along the way. "I am surrounded by a sea of colorful dresses, so much so that I missed the fact we are walking into the hall!" Little bits like that add vibrance. Why? "include the elements of 'setting' and describe the 'plot' as if you were there " \(\leftarrow\) would you just describe a setting as, "Hey it is huge!" or would you say, "This place is so big I could fit my whole house in here.... ten times!"

Answer 22

ok !

Answer 23

@e.mccormick

Answer 24

i changed the report into present tense -

Answer 25

" I made myself seated I saw the crowd was huge and the whole atmosphere was spectacular." needs and instead of the second I.

Yah, that makes it fall a lot more in line with the assignment's requirements. I'll need to read it again when my head is not dull of code.

Answer 26

ok changed it !

Answer 27

The Annual Academy Awards are getting held at the Hollywood Roosevelt Hotel, which is located in the heart of Hollywood. 20s, Celebrities are shining the Red Carpet right now, especially Janet Gaynor as soon as she got her leg out of her Rolls Royce, showing her silver, sparkly high heels, the fans and the paparazzi started to getting crazy, wild, screaming and snapping her pictures. I, myself went crazy because the celebs are looking outstanding, and they are all having a different style sense.

I entered the hall, moreover I am surrounded by a sea of colorful dresses, and so much that I missed the fact we are walking into the hall. I made myself seated and saw the crowd was huge and the whole atmosphere was spectacular. Even as I was watching, the whole report was spinning into my head word by word. The stage was magnificent, it had a big, glorious statue of the gold trophy, a big screen and it got more wonderful when the stars were dazzling the stage!

At the end of the day I was proud to write my new style of report about the First Annual Academy Awards, my report went like this… 85 years have passed, but the first Annual Academy Awards were the most phenomenal awards of the years. The 85 years of golden glamour, which has divined us made us explore the ultimate Oscar timeline of past winners, memorable moments and juicy tidbits, celebrating every single year of the Academy Awards. The dazzle Queens and the dazzle kings just to name a few, Gloria Swanson, Emil Jannings and Louise Dresser were the best actors and actresses of the golden glamour years. A hit silver screen film called “Wings” won the Outstanding Picture award. The golden glamour 85 years exquisite moments has given us three words “Creative, Inspiration and Entertainment”…

Answer 28

@tanya123 This is a great report that you have written! :)

Answer 29

The Annual Academy Awards are getting held at the Hollywood Roosevelt Hotel, which is located in the heart of Hollywood. 20\(\color{blue}{\text{[']}}\)s\(\color{blue}{\text{[no comma, using possessive,}}\) \(\color{blue}{\text{as in the celebrities of the 20s, so 20's celeb.]}}\)

Answer 30

Celebrities are shining the Red Carpet right now, especially Janet Gaynor as soon as she got her leg out of her Rolls Royce, showing her silver, sparkly high heels, the fans and the paparazzi started to getting crazy, wild, screaming and snapping her pictures.

<- that runs on. Might be easier if you break it at Janet Gaynor. Also, "...started to getting..." no to.


I, myself went crazy
Me, myself, and I have the same meaning. No need to use them at the same time unless you are stressing it for some reason.

because the celebs are looking outstanding,
look outstanding

and they are all having
all have

Answer 31

I entered the hall, moreover I am surrounded by a sea of colorful dresses, and so much that I missed the fact we are walking into the hall. I made myself seated and saw the crowd was huge and the whole atmosphere was spectacular. Even as I was watching, the whole report was spinning into my head word by word. The stage was magnificent, it had a big, glorious statue of the gold trophy, a big screen and it got more wonderful when the stars were dazzling the stage!

This is still largely past tense.

Answer 32

Things like "At the end of the day I was proud to write my new style of report about the First Annual Academy Awards...." need to be changed to, "It is the end of the day now and I am to write my new style of report about the First Annual Academy Awards...." to keep in the present tense.

You are getting closer!

Tip: Read things out loud. Sometimes we write things and skip bits as we go. If toy read stuff, it can help you see the missing or disjointed words.

Another trick is to start this process at the bottom. Start with the last line, read it, see if there are issues. Then read the line before it. This forces the brain to react differently than when you wrote it from front to back. That change in thinking will help you expose issues.

Answer 33

The Annual Academy Awards are getting held at the Hollywood Roosevelt Hotel, which is located in the heart of Hollywood. 20s, Celebrities are shining the Red Carpet right now, especially Janet Gaynor she got her leg out of her Rolls Royce, showing her silver, sparkly high heels, the fans and the paparazzi have started getting crazy, wild, screaming and snapping her pictures. I went crazy because the celebs look outstanding, and they all having a different style sense.

I entered the hall, and I am surrounded by a sea of colorful dresses, and so much that I missed the fact we are walking into the hall. I made myself seated and seeing the crowd is huge and the whole atmosphere is spectacular. Even as I am watching, the whole report is spinning into my head word by word. The stage is magnificent, it has a big, glorious statue of the gold trophy, a big screen and it gets furthermore wonderful time by time when the stars are dazzling the stage!

It is the end of the day now and I am to write my new style of report about the First Annual Academy Awards, and my report will go like this… 85 years have passed, but the first Annual Academy Awards were the most phenomenal awards of the years. The 85 years of golden glamour, which has divined us made us explore the ultimate Oscar timeline of past winners, memorable moments and juicy tidbits, celebrating every single year of the Academy Awards. The dazzle Queens and the dazzle kings just to name a few, Gloria Swanson, Emil Jannings and Louise Dresser were the best actors and actresses of the golden glamour years. A hit silver screen film called “Wings” won the Outstanding Picture award. The golden glamour 85 years exquisite moments has given us three words “Creative, Inspiration and Entertainment”…

Answer 34

ok, i hope this time there's no past tense remaining.....

Answer 35

Thank You SOO Much @calculusxy for checking it out !!!!!

Answer 36

That is more like it. Let it sit a day, if you can, without looking at it. Then read over it one more time to make sure it is how you want it.

I know that after all the past tense stuff you normally do, a present tense paper is a bit of a shock! But it is a good project because it has forced you to think about just how much tense makes up the content of something!

Answer 37

how should i change my story in the first paragraph ?

Answer 38

A reporter called Maria attended the 85th Oscars 2013 and what she wrote was the same words as she wrote about the previous Oscars, Fantastic, Marvelous and Stunning. Maria was kind of bored writing almost the same reports every year, so she decided to go back to the year 1929 to attend the First Annual Academy Awards which was officially known by the name of “Oscars” and write a report about that.

Answer 39

As an introducion, I am not sure if it needs to be in present tense, however, you could put it in the first person to go along with the rest a little better. So the overall flow would be:

This is what I decided (The intro)
This is what I am doing now (The story)
This is what I plan to do next (Writing new report)

Answer 40

Things like a reporter become I, Maria, am a reporter. And I decided... etc.

Answer 41

no its not working i dont know where to fit it.... in the first sentence it going like attending the 85th oscar which current...

but then going back to the 1929....

Answer 42

First person is my point of view. So this part you leave past, but you write it as if you were describing you.

Answer 43

Here is an example:

3rd person:

Earlier today a programmer, Eric, finished off fifteen assignments. He thought they were going to be difficult because the lab work had been quite a chore. However, they proved to be much easier than expected and he finished quickly.

1st person:

Earlier today, I, Eric, finished off fifteen programming assignments. I thought they were going to be difficult because the lab work had been quite a chore. However, they proved to be much easier than expected and I was able to finish quickly.

Answer 44

like ----
today i was supposed to write a about the 85th oscars that i attended yesturday. As a famous reporter, i couldn't think of anything except the old words i used for the 84th oscar... Fantastic, Marvelous and Stunning..

Answer 45

EXACTLY! That just makes it in the first person, like the rest, which will help the overall flow. I think it makes a ebtter paper because you have not just the chain of events, but also a past, present, and future.

Answer 46

OK... bt the main point where i'm getting stuck is how should i started the 1929th concept?

Answer 47

I was bored, I went back... Lot of "I" in there... I was bored... bla bla... so going back to the 1929 Oscars seemed like a great solution to me! Change it from I I I to I looped around somehow and me. Makes it seem less repetitive.

Answer 48

ok now this is how put it up ->
Today I was supposed to write a about the 85th Oscars that I attended yesterday. As a famous reporter, I couldn't think of anything except the old words I used for the 84th Oscar; Fantastic, Marvelous and Stunning. I was quite getting bored of it. So going back to the year 1929, the First Annual Academy Awards which was officially known by the name of “Oscars” and write a report about that seemed like a great solution to me!

Answer 49

Sounds great. Sorry bout the delay... seems the script for the site crashed and I was not getting updates!

Answer 50

No Problem...
Thank you soo much for taking ur time and working hard on it !!!!

"I am surrounded by a sea of colorful dresses, so much so that I missed the fact we are walking into the hall!" ---- did u write it urself ???

Answer 51

I list the author when I quote things. Otherwise, it is what I write.

Answer 52

Here, a couple more for you to look at that I have tossed around:
\(\begin{matrix}\hline\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\end{matrix}\)
Somewhere between my ears lies a vast reservoir of stories, visions, and sounds. If only the bounds of my skull could be breached in such a way to share it. Ah, the things I could express.
\(\begin{matrix}\hline\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\end{matrix}\)
Try as not to try as can,
for deeds to heart make the man.
In bosom bold is but thought,
but kind deeds are more than not.
\(\begin{matrix}\hline\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\end{matrix}\)
Hope flows from the heart. I see in a different way that which is but a dream. It is not as such to me. A dream is more and less than what people think, see and feel. It is the sum of all these, and yet their divisors.

Knowing this to be true, I gain my dreams as I leave them behind. As I reach for them, they change, and what I grasp is neither the dream, nor the process. It simply is the actuality of what is. Thus where I started in dream, passed in life, and achieved in the end, are all different, yet still one.

Pass into the eye of your own self. It is no easy task, this understanding.

The reward is worth the cost.
\(\begin{matrix}\hline\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\qquad\end{matrix}\)
In heaven's door lies a key, but for only you and me to see.
It is neither slender nor round, the shape something more profound.
From nativity's cry to bier's wake, this door's handle we can not shake.
When final moments have done past, to such a place we do repast.
Finding not food of body or want, what we eat is repast of haunt.
Between here and there we do see, oh such the life of you and me.
Ponder and wonder in moments time, unpleasantry too by seeing crime.
Such was all our joy and hate, what we shared in our fate.
But now the key spins in seal, and final fate does a deal.
Hearts of joy and sorrow sing, this now our final fling.
Once crossed the hearth of there, closed now our book's fair.
Does return the door's closure, key twisting with composure.
Who now will will it be, next death's door to see.

Answer 53

wow these are awesome !!!!!

Answer 54

The funny thing is, most people can do a great description. If they are really into something and they tell a friend, the comfort and interest make them come alive with vast descriptions that fill up the room. A normally reserved guy might talk passionately about his favorite car, turning each part of it into a work of art with wondrous words.

Then we sit in class.

We look at something not interesting to us and say, "How am I supposed to write about this? I don't know how to write these thing!" And more. But we have done that writing in other ways. In dreams and stories and play and interests.

The hard part is grasping hold of that imagination we have all had, wiping the dust that has gathered as they buried it in math books and history lessons and other things, and breathing life back into it. Then, invigorated, you can turn a phrase or three and make something far more vibrant in your works, or with a dark edge that truly chills, or with a light heart that carries, and so on.