Question

Help English

Answer 1

All people have a dream to get their own car,me also to.I have one dream get good job and earn money good money and buy my dream car BMW M3 Black or White.I really like it because its one of my favorite sports car.It has good shape especially at front looks perfect.I saw many test drives and car crashes test its strong can take hard hits and still didn't damage much

Answer 2

@e.mccormick

Answer 3

if its possible something fix and continue

Answer 4

so what you think?

Answer 5

And introduction paragraph goes over the things you will expand on later. Pick two or three topics you feel are key. List them very briefly in the intro paragraph, say one line each. Then the later paragraphs can expand on those things.

Lets take this start (tweaked):

All people dream of having their own car, and I am no different. I have one dream: get good job and earn money, good money, so I can buy my dream car, the BMW M3 in Black or White. I really like it! It is my favorite sports car. It has good shape, especially from the front, which looks perfect. I have seen many test drives and car crash tests done on the M3. It's strong and can take hard hits without sustaining much damage.

Because you have the damage it can take last, use that to lead into more information on the impact tests, safety, and so on. Finish that paragraph with something about how even after all these things are done, it looks good. That leads you into a paragraph on the look of the car. Etc.

Answer 6

umm you have any ideas ? it looks good you fixed beginning great ending something special about BMW

Answer 7

Like I said, because you talked about crashes last in the intro, it makes a good lead into that as the next paragraph. You say you have seen many crash tests. OK. Talk a bit more about that. Flesh it out. Instead of one little line on it, give some details. Compare the safety to that of another car. Quote the company if you must, but keep that to only one line. A summary of their safety report would even do.

Answer 8

i talked only it safe to drive even if you crash i saw vid i don't witch car bmw crashed but it didn't damage much but other car damaged hard the only away to that car is go to dump

Answer 9

but service on this car expensive

Answer 10

That would be part of a counter argument, which is fine to include.

Just find the things you feel you can write a paragraph on and do so. Once you have a few paragraphs, write an introduction that works for those. Then do a little adjusting to make it all some together.

Answer 11

Oks :)

Answer 12

whats your favorite car?

Answer 13

Don't have one.

Answer 14

???

Answer 15

so that means you like all kind of cars?

Answer 16

I have driven mopeds, rice rockets, cruisers, compact cars, sedans, trucks (mini, mid, full), 18 wheelers, step vans and more. Never found any I liked particularly more than others.

Answer 17

umm witch logo car type you like lets say porsche or Lambraghini or Bmw etc

Answer 18

I don't pay enough attention to them to care. I view vehicles as a convenient way to get from point A to B and their size and shape only determines how much you can take with you how easily. Two I find interesting are the Hayes Diesel Motorcycle, http://www.dieselmotorcycles.com/ , and the Elio, http://www.eliomotors.com/ . That has to do with MPG.

Answer 19

how about i argument Bmw M3 Vs Lexus IS-F

Answer 20

compare

Answer 21

Never looked at either of them.

Answer 22

no if i write in my essay how i would start? you said after safety talk about Bmw then you said do argument with other car

Answer 23

http://www.caradvice.com.au/21628/bmw-m3-versus-lexus-is-f/ take look their is info and alot information about BMW m3 vs Lexus IS-F

Answer 24

Well, I'm not the one that needs to know about them to write about them. But in general, contrasting a related thing is one way you can do things. It all comes down to what you think you can write about.

Answer 25

im tell you truth im kinda bad with writing essay's English is my second language and i study it only second year

Answer 26

hey erdog

Answer 27

could you help me finish essay ?

Answer 28

uhh... I don't know much about cars.

Answer 29

:/

Answer 30

The essay is My Favorite car or The car i would like to have .

Answer 31

What grade are you in and how long does it have to be?

Answer 32

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Answer 33

Um My English Gave me that topic and im not in school just studying English IM in collge so about 150-250 words since i study for 2 years but if i knew english 100% they would say 800-1500

Answer 34

Where are you from?

Answer 35

you can right essay like that (My favorite car is ______ etc you put those blanks i feel them with my information

Answer 36

i just need base of essay

Answer 37

As @e.mccormick said, when writing an essay you need to elongate the information you already have. Start with a longer introduction, starting with vague statements, and then getting a bit more detailed and relate it back to you. Explain some history of the BMW (maybe not but still http://www.bmw.com/com/en/insights/history/overview.html ) And then explain what about the shape of the car is interesting, explain how it handles crashes well, and maybe go on into some science or something. Then, end with a conclusion paragraph summing up some good and bad things about this car.

Answer 38

Is that helpful?

Answer 39

no really i thought you wrote draft like i showed you

Answer 40

@erdog82

Answer 41

if you really can do this please mail me in box i have to go be back tomorrow i hope you will help me thnx have nice day