ANY ONE CAN HELP ME WITH ENGLISH PLEASE

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anonymous · Answer

What do you need help with specifically?

anonymous · Answer

Can you check this sentence and let me know if it need to be corrected. I'm originally from russia

anonymous · Answer

Mom, Dad, Jing Mei are living in San Fransisco, California Chinatown. It takes place in her home and in Mr. Chong's house, and at the talent show at church.

littlenugget · Answer

it's all good! one question, who's home is it? Is it Mom, Dad, and Jing Mei's home?

anonymous · Answer

mom's house

littlenugget · Answer

yep then the sentence is perfect! although you might want to say Mom's house instead of her, just to make it easier for the reader :)

anonymous · Answer

ok thank you so much

anonymous · Answer

i have another one :)

anonymous · Answer

It was very important to her mother that her friends and family came, and it makes bigger conflicts between the mother and daughter.

littlenugget · Answer

who is "her"?

anonymous · Answer

it doesnt say the name of the mother in the story

anonymous · Answer

Jing mei's mother

littlenugget · Answer

ohh ok. so Jing mei is the daughter?

anonymous · Answer

yes

littlenugget · Answer

So to let the reader know who "her" is, you should put Jing mei instead for the first one ;) so like this:
It was very important to Jing Mei's mother that her friends and family came, and it makes bigger conflicts between the mother and daughter. 
Instead of "makes" i think you should put cause, it'll be a better word ;) 
but the rest is perfect!!!!! :D

littlenugget · Answer

i mean "causes"

anonymous · Answer

ok

anonymous · Answer

@littlenugget Story told through Jing-Mei personal perspective, and the mother is who the main conflicts is with.

littlenugget · Answer

what exactly do you mean by this? like is the mom having a good life because of her daughter? 
ohhh ok :) thanks, that'll help a lot :)

anonymous · Answer

@littlenugget do you see it now

littlenugget · Answer

Yes! you should put: 
The story is told through Jing-Mei's personal perspective, and the mother is who the main conflict is with.

anonymous · Answer

@littlenugget Human vs Herself.

Jing Mei is struggling to figure out who she is.

littlenugget · Answer

yep that one's good :)

anonymous · Answer

@littlenugget It sets up a conflict with Jing mei.

"American was where my mother's hopes lay" from book called Two KInds