Question

REVIEW THIS SONG, TELL ME HOW IT IS PLEASE
This is targeted at my parents, it is a coming out song. I have attached a partial part of music too. It covers the beginning music and repeated part.

Answer 1

fine, nobody reply then.............. i will delete this so people cant steal it

Answer 2

wish i could see it honey

Answer 3

wish i could see to

Answer 4

@*STAR* @kbear1230 here is the song if you want to see it
its not done yet though ._. i have been too busy to finish, needs minor editing

Coming Out Rap by Emoticon

Music in progression1.it

-intro (just talking while beginning music plays)-
Hey everyone,
I'm coming here to make a confession.
It's real important. Please just listen
i mean it
i really do

-repeated chords-
My parents sent me to psychology, when I was in 6th grade.
I'm sure it was cause of all the stuff I did, trying not to act gay.
I thought that it was fun, even though life is not a game.
I messed up and everyone thought that my heads not on straight.
I never thought I had problems, that conclusion is ridiculous.
And I never even thought for once why I was so meticulous.
Became obsessed with things that I didn't want to mess with.
Having these feelings each and every every single day.
I have never been perfect, even to today.
But boy, you know I never really thought for once that I was gay.
Honestly once I really knew, I just cried I was afraid.
My parents thought that it was a giant sin to be gay.
I had some characteristics, of those who liked the same sex,
all those things I said to myself, "its only a statistic."
Pushing it all under the rug like it is nobody's business.
When you asked me certain questions I said its none of your business.
When I was in 9th grade, I got my first girlfriend.
We went to homecoming and you guys thought that we were, a-courting.
I realized after a while that we never went to tier two
I never even kissed her, I couldn't bring myself to.
Now that she was gone, I didn't know what to do.
So you know what? Now I do, I have something to prove.

-interlude1-
Why am I sitting here all scared,
when I could just come out now.
I don't know why I have all these stupid fears,
I really need to come out now.
All these text files that I have been collecting,
filling up my hard drive now.
All my thoughts and fears gathered through the years, I am coming out right now.

-repeated chords 2-
I was assigned to a therapist to cure my depression.
I then I released my thoughts to her, got rid of the oppression.
I told her, "I know this is weird, but I think I might be gay."
She told me, "That is fine, I'll help you anyway"
She is the only person who knew at the time,
When I came out my happiness was in perfect rhyme,
and for once I felt like I was free that time
but honestly I knew I would have to try another time.
I was never free, at least not right yet
I had't told anyone else about it yet
I have to give it time because I'm sitting here in rhyme.
While all this time I'm thinking "is it really true this time?"
Last week, online, I'm just sitting, being weak.
A friend comes on and says, hey man, long time no speak.
We talk for a long time and then I figure out something.
I just think, hey man, did we do it, have we really started something.
He is now my guy friend he has feelings for me.
He supports me, doesn't doubt me.
But you guys, all you do is doubt me.
Lying used to be my only passion and my youth.
But now that I am coming out I'm telling you the truth.
I'm not trying to be a saint, not trying to be a sinner.
You know if you want me to leave,
I guess I'm going, see you later.

You can't prevent me from spending my youth,
full of happiness, telling the truth.
It was a hard decision, deciding to come out.
Now that I am doing it, to my boyfriend now I shout.

-interlude2-
You are my life saver thrown out of nowhere.
I would have drowned if not for you and you alone.
I was so lonely, floating in the middle of nowhere
and you came right out and you pulled me back to shore.

-repeat again-
Yeah I wrote this song, man, I wrote it because of you.
I have to give you props, because you are the savior of my youth.
My parents just don't understand,but I am glad you gave me a hand.
A message to all you haters now, I'm taking my last stand.
I even prayed to the Lord, and I asked him why,
why would you even make gays, do you just want me to die?
I don't think God would make me gay, so that I can burn in hell.
Earthly life is bad enough, trust me all is never well.
Saying that being gay is only just a choice,
That is your opinion, not His words, not God's voice.
My heads not on wrong, yours is, all you people,
Not defending and standing watching, not using your voice.
Not helping out for the common good, hoping all the gays go back to the hood
Where they came from, except that they did not,
There are gays in every part of the world from places like
slums and poor countries you see on TV,
and nice places to live, that's not just me.
All my life I have been closeted, not being me at all.
Now for all you people, here is my wake up call.

-interlude3-
Destroy what destroys you, destroy what ails you,
destroy myths and fears and things that happen and set us all apart.
So what if you aren't accepting, I'll just find a place that is, this is just a fact of life, now everybodies biz.

-repeat modified-
I am tired of hearing how sick we are on TV,
gay people pretty much the scum of humanity,
I hope this coming out rap shows you that I need to be free.
I can tell you right now, exactly what I need.
From stereotypes, opression, and all that stupid fiction.
All those things in the news, they only cause us friction.
Remove the pellet, remove the fear, the thing that has made me sad for years.
Now I come out to you today, yeah I'm gay.
Mom, dad, please accept me for today.

-end talking while end plays-
Sorry for breaking you guy's hearts
I just couldn't stand being alone any longer.
Please understand.