Question

I was wondering someone would be willing to go through my essay and critique any grammatical errors they find.

Answer 1

ok, where is your essay?

Answer 2

The Logic of Collective Action Response

The right of assembly has become a staple in our current society. Mancur Olson Jr. pointed out many of the advantages of collective human power including pushing higher wages and making the word of the masses heard by the few in power. By and large I agree with presented arguments such as using labor unions to combat the power of upper management and interest groups making their political opinion known to the representative. There are however some flaws throughout group theory that aren’t touched in the article including power hungry leaders, extended bureaucracy, and unchecked groups.
Forming groups and associations are the foundation of a successful and balanced society. Olson wrote about the labor unions for instance, which are a key component to making sure unskilled workers are protected. The laws around workers can only go so far before a group like the USW, United Steelworkers, has to step in. Unions like it are able to pressure upper management into continual improvements to working conditions where the law is either weak or nonexistent. Safe environments for workers contribute to more workers staying, leading to increased production, which is to be desired in America and other countries struggling with debt. Another example of a successful group is that of special interest groups, which are able to showcase their political views to a representative. As individual in a district made up of possibly millions it is hard to have your voice heard by one representative. Special interest groups are able to bring together people of similar views, consolidate them, and present them to a representative in a manner that one can’t ignore. Labor unions and special interest groups are two of the most effective groups in our current society, but even they have flaws like many groups in America.
The primary concepts that seem to be overlooked in the article are unintended consequences that result from forming groups. One of the major issues that results from powerful groups are the even more powerful leaders. Human nature would indicate that once they get power they are prone to doing whatever they can to hold onto it as long as possible. When a person tries to hold onto power once their time has expired corrupt ideas are fostered, such as bribery and coercion. At that point society has to deal with these new powerful group leaders who refuse to give up power and begin taking whatever benefits them from the position, leading to little to no progression towards the common interest the group was constructed upon. Another flaw that is present when groups are given power in a place like America is that they serve as extension of the bureaucracy. An example of extended bureaucracy would be when large labor unions leaders are invited into meetings with members of the cabinet to discuss policy. The basic concept of this isn’t frowned upon, but when analyzed one will see that the added non-elected politicians take power away from the voters. It is unfair for those of other business sects to be subdued because of how their industry operates. Lastly, some groups can be left unchecked opening doors to groups getting more than the others can afford or the members deserve. One recent incident involving this was when Hostess went under because the workers were pressuring for pay raises while the company was losing money. Now that Hostess has come back they are very much opposed to labor unions, which is detrimental to the concept they were founded on. Groups like labor unions need to be kept in control to prevent their benefits from falling to the wayside.
Overall this article was able to showcase what grouping up has to offer to society. The article seems incomplete due to the lack of acknowledgement of possible flaws. Now the issue we have to deal with now is how are we going to maintain both power and control of the groups without spending more money on it than they are worth?

Answer 3

Its just a informal response for poli sci calss

Answer 4

Everything about it is really good but you need to proof read and add better punctuation and I don't think you are permitted to use "This article was about..." or some sort of obvious summary sentence. For an easy summary, start out with a claim then introduce the source by using words such as; argues/reports/contends/maintains/states.