I need help for the following sentence on it used of comma:

When the fox was well clear Tom rose in his stirrups, held up his hat and ride holla’d it away in a hig-sea roar that brought the huntman tearing round, his horn going twang-twang-twang, and hounds racing from the furze at all points.

Should it be:
When the fox was well clear, Tom rose in his stirrups, held up his hat and ride holla’d it away in a hig-sea roar that brought the huntman tearing round, his horn going twang-twang-twang, and hounds racing from the furze at all points.

Are both sentences correct?

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I need help for the following sentence on it used of comma:

When the fox was well clear Tom rose in his stirrups, held up his hat and ride holla’d it away in a hig-sea roar that brought the huntman tearing round, his horn going twang-twang-twang, and hounds racing from the furze at all points.

Should it be:
When the fox was well clear, Tom rose in his stirrups, held up his hat and ride holla’d it away in a hig-sea roar that brought the huntman tearing round, his horn going twang-twang-twang, and hounds racing from the furze at all points.


Are both sentences correct?

timaashorty · Answer

The second one seems correct, but the first is incorrect. Are those your only choices ?

anonymous · Answer

Yes. The first sentence was quoted from a book. I thought there is something wrong about it.

How about this sentence on the used of comma:
As his horse rose Jack screwed round to see how the girl would get over, and the gelding instantly felt this change of balance.

Should it be:
As his horse rose, Jack screwed round to see how the girl would get over, and the gelding instantly felt this change of balance.

anonymous · Answer

Another question:

She was a reserved creature, being much in an inward dream whose nature she did not communicate to anyone.

Should it be restructured :

 She was a reserved creature, being much in an inward dream whose nature of not communicate to anyone.

Is the first sentence structured correctly? and the second sentence is it a good fix to the first?

timaashorty · Answer

the  second answer correct too, because after as his horse rose, their should be a comma. 
I would explain more but I'm answering from my phone it's difficult to type.

timaashorty · Answer

The both are the same sentences, nothing is different..

timaashorty · Answer

^that was for the third answer

anonymous · Answer

Thanks! It clears my doubt on Question 1 and Question 2.

For Question 3, it seem to me that the first sentance does not sound right with a independent clause "she did not communicate to anyone". I finds that the sentence should have modified.

timaashorty · Answer

Alright you're welcome!(: did I help your  what you needed ?

timaashorty · Answer

*in what