can someone please proofread my paper?

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anonymous · Answer

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anonymous · Answer

Looks good to me

senkai · Answer

I think you need to fix some of the grammar in it, and put commas where they're needed, but other than that it looks good.

anonymous · Answer

You need also to fix your grammar and your capitalization :)

anonymous · Answer

Also the spacing

timaashorty · Answer

You used alot of big words which is pretty great, You just need a little fixing in the grammar just like everyone else said. Also you added additional periods (....) which isn't really needed.

timaashorty · Answer

did just copy stuff and pasted? Because when you started saying," line following.." it pretty much didn't make sense, but I proof edited a few stuff, hope I helped !

timaashorty · Answer

I think all you need now, is to make a few sentences shorter, you use 'ands' and 'buts' in one sentence a bit too much.