Question

can someone please proofread my paper?

Answer 1

Looks good to me

Answer 2

I think you need to fix some of the grammar in it, and put commas where they're needed, but other than that it looks good.

Answer 3

You need also to fix your grammar and your capitalization :)

Answer 4

Also the spacing

Answer 5

You used alot of big words which is pretty great, You just need a little fixing in the grammar just like everyone else said. Also you added additional periods (....) which isn't really needed.

Answer 6

did just copy stuff and pasted? Because when you started saying," line following.." it pretty much didn't make sense, but I proof edited a few stuff, hope I helped !

Answer 7

I think all you need now, is to make a few sentences shorter, you use 'ands' and 'buts' in one sentence a bit too much.