Question

Can you give me some critique on my epilogue to my story. It is called Night Hour.

Answer 1

I stared into the mirror with blank expression painted on my face. My lips, a dark blood red, was striking against my pale white skin. I turned my head slightly and the skin on my face caught the sunlight. A silvery glow emitted from my skin creating a bright aura that surrounded me. I gingerly touched my face and traced patterns around my cheek, my finger leaving a glimmering trail wherever it touched. Suddenly, I felt goosebumps erupt all over my glowing skin as the pleasant warmth was replaced by a cold chill that swept the room. It was as I feared the night hour had begun.

Answer 2

@butterfly99

Answer 3

Oh I really like that!

Answer 4

It is...AWESOME...a little scary...but AWESOME!!!!!!

Answer 5

very interesting, but you're repetitive in some places

Answer 6

sounds cool..... what genre is your book? Horror?

Answer 7

Wouldn't this be posted in writing? It's good so far, but you should post it in the writing section.

Answer 8

On the last sentence, you need to add a comma after feared

Answer 9

It was as I feared, the night hour had begun.