Question

Can you give me some critique on my epilogue to my story. It is called Night Hour.

Answer 1

I stared into the mirror with blank expression painted on my face. My lips, a dark blood red, was striking against my pale white skin. I turned my head slightly and the skin on my face caught the sunlight. A silvery glow emitted from my skin creating a bright aura that surrounded me. I gingerly touched my face and traced patterns around my cheek, my finger leaving a glimmering trail wherever it touched. Suddenly, I felt goosebumps erupt all over my glowing skin as the pleasant warmth was replaced by a cold chill that swept the room. It was as I feared the night hour had begun.

Answer 2

--> @Smexi_Girl

Answer 3

This is excellent !! I don't think you should make any changes to it. I like it!! Did you write this?

Answer 4

The Well one change : Maybe you should take out the very first line. Read it without that and tell what you think,

Answer 5

oh thats a goo idea thx soooo much

Answer 6

No problem your welcome :))

Answer 7

That's amazing don't change a thing. :)

Answer 8

thx soo much!

Answer 9

As a writer myself i have to say this is excellent work congrats! amazing!