Question

Can someone look over this and tell me if it needs editing or if its okay to submit for me scholarship essay. Its on greatest challenges you have faced or will face in the future.

Answer 1

I have this--

The greatest challenges i’ve faced throughout my life so far have been tough, but i’ve made it through them with help from friends, family and teachers. My most rugged challenge i’ve had to face would be the lack of guidance in my life and circumstances in my life forcing me to mature faster than other kids my age. Since my mom wasn't in the picture much, I missed out on being able go on field trips with her, allowing me to go to sleepovers, and enjoying having a mom around. Also I had to step in as the mom for my little sister and brother. My mother's attention problem and alcoholism forced me to mature faster than other kids my age.

Since my mom was either all night at bars or sleeping in, I stayed home and took care of myself, plus my two younger siblings. It was hard for me when they would ask where mom was and when they would get mad at me and yell that i’m not their mom. Which was true, I wasn't, but I had to step in and be a substitute mom. For school, I got home quick so that I could clean up the house, and be ready to help them with their homework. Then i’d have to feed them and get them to bed with barely any time for me to clean up and get my own homework done for school the next day. As a result of her not being there, I started to fall behind in school, and had difficulty keeping up during practices at cheer. No one knew what was going on in my family, I was embarrassed and I didn't have the confidence to stand up to her.

Finally I started to ask some of my teachers if I could possibly get extension due dates on some of my assignments. Most of my teachers understood and let me. It was harder trying to explain to my little sisters and little brothers teacher. My little brother liked to be the class clown in the class, and his teacher would write notes home in his planner explaining what he did and sometimes asking for parent conferences. Of course I would tell my mom that she needed to go in and speak to his teacher. Except some how she would never go, she'd end up making plans with someone to go to the bar or would be to hungover the next day to understand what I was saying to her. I believe it was harder for my little brother and me, he was falling behind in class from having trouble reading. He would guess a word by the first two letter instead of sounding out the letters. It took me a while to help him check up with the class but he made it and was able to move on to the next grade.

The hardest parts for my little sister and me would be trying to get her projects done for school and getting to cheer practices. We always got her work done some how whether we had to try and write her assignments out instead of typing it or emailing it to the teacher if we couldn't print it that day. Trying to get rides to practices in Pinellas Park was hard for my little sister more than me. Since she was on a younger team it was not easy finding parents that lived in Pinellas Park to drive her home to Clearwater. But usually we could find someone nice enough to drive us.

While I was pressed into a parental role that made me more mature, I did missed many opportunities to enjoy my childhood experiences. I did though make sure my little brother and sister was able to experience most of theirs, by doing flag football at t-birds, girl scouts, cheerleading, and boy scouts. My mother did start dating a man she knew from high school, and he was someone I trusted to help me out with my little brother and sister. He was a great help in the first year he was in the picture. I made a huge choice to contact my dad after not talking for seven years and asking him if I could move in with him. I got help from two friends and my father and I moved last year after christmas. I still stay in contact with my little brother and sister, but I don't speak much to my mother. Since I stayed in control and was able to overcome this challenge in my life, and I know I am able to stay positive and in control when something goes wrong in my life.

Answer 2

Its great, I dont see anything wrong with it.

Answer 3

Hope you get that scholarship you deserve it!

Answer 4

Thanks.. I do too :)