Question

Could I get some help on my review? I answered all of them. But I'm not very confident on some.
Questions will be in comments. Thanks.

Answer 1

Monika’s draft of a reflective essay about her first trip to summer camp included the following sentences:

I knew this camp was going to be a disappointment.

I entered the dark, musty cabin and realized the window was nailed shut.

There were cobwebs everywhere.

Monica wanted to revise her draft to enhance her syntax. Monika’s new sentence is:

When I entered the dark, musty cabin, realized the window was nailed shut, and noticed the cobwebs everywhere, I knew this camp was going to be a disappointment.

Which statement BEST describes they type and effect of Monika’s revised sentence?


A. It is a periodic sentence intended to build suspense, but it is punctuated incorrectly.
B. It is a simple sentence intended to express quick action, but it is punctuated incorrectly.
C. It is a correctly punctuated periodic sentence intended to build suspense by saving the main clause for the end of the sentence.
D. It is a correctly punctuated simple sentence intended to express quick action.

Answer 2

Linda’s draft of a reflective essay about her first day of work included the following:

I was uncomfortable with the itchy polyester uniform. The flashing buttons on the computer screen were overwhelming for me. I was shocked by how many people ordered fast food in one day. Making it out alive was not a certainty.

During revision, Linda combined sentences to improve the syntactical structure. Read the revised sentence.

I was uncomfortable with the itchy polyester uniform, overwhelmed by the flashing buttons on the computer screen, shocked by how many people ordered fast food in one day, and uncertain I would make it out alive.

Which statement BEST describes Linda’s new sentence?


A. It is a correctly punctuated sentence that uses parallel structure to show that each of Linda’s feelings is given equal importance.
B. It is a correctly punctuated sentence that lists ideas in order of descending importance.
C. It is a correctly punctuated sentence that lists ideas in order of ascending importance.
D. It is a sentence that uses parallel structure to show that each of Linda’s feelings is given equal importance, but it is punctuated incorrectly.

Answer 3

The first one I choose A the second one I choose C.